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Thinking of you (wishing that we were young again)



I'm thinking of you-
and the things we used to do;
(those magic mushrooms),
i'm wishing that we were young again.

Those butterfly rims-
from the national health service;
and that cardy, that my grandad,
would be proud of.

I'm thinking of you-
stacking shelves and sniffing glue;
drinking bacardi,
i'm wishing that we were young again.

My very first toot-
from your regal filter box;
and that tape, (Pink Floyd's "Time")
scared me shitless.

I'm thinking of you-
and that curious home brew;
(it tasted horrid),
i'm wishing that we were young again.

Playing on the vectrex-
crowded 'round that perspex screen;
when you thought, that you were,
...a catfish monster.

I'm thinking of you-
and the times I shared with you;
I miss you matey,

i'm wishing that we were young again.


For barney.

Author notes

Option 3. This is about a friend who's sadly not with us anymore.
"vectrex"; an old games console from the early 80's.

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  • Symphony
    February 6

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    This was so personal - you really opened up an old era to us, one that we don't see a lot of anymore, and made it personal and alive - very well done!

    I liked the repetition of the words, at first I thought this was based or inspired by the song from Phantom of the Opera [perhaps it was?] Wishing You Were Somehow Here Again, which is an old old favourite of mine!

    Thank you for entering, and I'm sorry for the loss of your friend - it sounds like you had many good memories together


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    January 21

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    Ok.... this has been entered into ALOT of competitions!

    Anyway, I really liked this write. It's sad when it's the end of an era...I've been through a lot of those recently.

    Soul searching... remembering.
    Great write.


  • adsaige
    January 1

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    Judged

    Undoubtfully, it is a sad thing to lose a friend, and it would be an even sadder thing to not cherish their memory well. Thank you for entering. Good luck.


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    November 19, 2008
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    Thank you for your most heart spoken entry, Josie


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    September 3, 2008

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    left align only here ... you have plenty of time to edit, and this is very good indeed, but no center justification allowed

    thank you for entering this contest


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 18, 2008

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    Ahhh how I come to think this way as well... It's never easy, to have to let go of the old memories and really we shouldn't have to, as they are a reminder of those real good times.

  • Judith Chandler
    April 24, 2008

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    There is so much implied in this. I like that. "Wishing that we were young again" somehow implies that the person who says this has gone beyond youth in a better way than the one the poem is addressed to. You never really say what happened to Barney but I kept thinking it couldn't be good.

    Thanks for the sense of mystery though there is a feeling of dread.


  • azlyn gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    Very nice tribute to your friend. I find myself wishing for those old days as well. Thanks and best of luck!!!


    Az


  • Blooming Poet
    April 4, 2008
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    Beautiful poem. The unswered questions and the wishes to turn back time is a natural part of this kind of thing. Love this: I'm thinking of you- stacking shelves and sniffing glue; drinking bacardi, i'm wishing that we were young again.


  • Blooming Poet
    February 8, 2008

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    we all wish we were young again for whatever reason, unfortuntly that not possible. shame, shame isn't it


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    You obviously had some great times with your friend... I'm sorry he's gone. Thank you for this heartfelt entry!


  • wings from god 28
    January 5, 2008
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    good poem

    thank you for entering


  • Rana
    November 12, 2007
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    Thank you for entering. This was very unique.

  • trace3grls
    November 2, 2007
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    great write


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    October 23, 2007

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    :)

    Great poem
    I love this alot.
    Makes me want to make the most
    Of my young years.
    Great Job
    Good luck in my contest
    From Jaz <3


  • -CrimsonTears-
    October 10, 2007

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    i like it a lot...and how you remember all those things and wish you were young again make me never want to grow up...good job..
    good luck in the contest


  • live in love
    October 9, 2007

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    interesting

    it flows and runs very well and is written beautifully though the content might be misunderstood by some people i like this a lot thanks for entering
    lil


  • Dancing Rebel
    September 20, 2007

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    excellent

    This is a beautifully written poem. Thank you for entering into my contest.
    Wishing you well
    and the best of luck in my contest
    Zoe xxx


  • diddly-squit
    July 20, 2007

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    this poems is so sweet. that's all i can really say it is so sweet someone looking back at good times of rebeling i love this poem. Good luck in this contest and good luck with ur life. xXx

  • Tefnut
    July 6, 2007

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    wow
    you used the word matey
    and it didn't sound horrid
    congratulations that's the first time ..I've seen that happen

    great write
    I would probly love this song..if it had music to it
    one of those make you see the past songs..nice


  • th3sl4y3r
    May 30, 2007

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    this is an excellent tribute poem, so well put, obvioulsly personal and very sweet, memories are great things to keep and they always stay with you... I have thought many thing similar to this many times before, and wish we where all young again... the flow and rhythm is great, and the emotions are deeply felt, well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always..


  • Procrastination
    May 26, 2007

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    Very cool poem. Your memories from being younger sound more exciting than the memories I'm making at the moment. Goodluck in the contest. Emily x


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    May 24, 2007

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    Ah. now you have made me so sad every thing that you have said and many more, brought back to memory when we were young very inspiring.
    Thank you for entering the contest and good luck


  • seasonsoflove
    May 17, 2007
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    Great job... putting wishes into the poem is a great way to write.


  • The Cube
    May 15, 2007
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    Good write. Very emotional and has some abstraction to it as well. Good luck to you in the contest.


  • Sam-I-Am
    April 29, 2007
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    I agree with other comments. A really god write, but sad.
    Well done and good luck
    Midnight


  • Bruised.Roses
    April 26, 2007

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    aww this was a good write but sad..it flowed really well and your words were powerful and emotional as well keep writting your talented and good luck in the contest.
    XTashaX


  • okadadokie
    April 25, 2007

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    Ok I may be a bit confused, I'm not so sure of the meaning of this poem, but it was creative, and well written. Best of luck in my contest.

    ~Oka/KC


  • Kaitlin Katastrophe
    April 21, 2007

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    WOW. This is a heartfelt poem. You guys did weird stuff using that as inseration for a poem is genious.
    I'm sorry you lost a dear friend.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Heavens Child
    April 21, 2007

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    I love how you dwell on the memories that you have instead of the tragedy of the loss. I had to smile as I can relate to have doing similar things This is a great tribute to your friend... thank you for the entry in my contest.


  • WriteOrWrong597
    April 20, 2007

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    This is really sad, but I liked it. Great flow and light tone, despite the pain that this conveys. Because of this write, Barney is sure to live forever. As Shakespeare said "So long as men can breathe, or eyes can see,
    So long lives this, and this gives life to thee"
    Great write.


  • yourbentangel
    April 18, 2007

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    Very very nice. I like the flow of this and the sincere heartfelt emotion behind it. I think that this is wonderful. GREAT JOB. Good luck and thank you for entering!


  • Dark Whispers
    April 17, 2007

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    Im really sorry about your loss , but I hope you know tht she's in a better place. this poem is a great tribute to her. thanks for entering


  • I-Am-Custard
    April 16, 2007

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    hmmm... sad, beautifully written, but not sad enough, this is more reminiscent if anything, DQed, lovely as it is. Please feel free to enter again with something more fitting.


  • Crazy-Baby
    April 1, 2007

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    i love this, it really made me smile, its so good when you can look back and smile rather than cry, even though it is painful to lose someone, being sad wont help anyone. thankyou for this entry well done x x x x


  • SensualWhispers
    February 10, 2007

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    I see.

    ................well then. Was definately different and has a flow that was very unique. I really enjoyed the song. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie.


  • fingersthejohn
    January 29, 2007

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    a proud owl hoots

    Think the barn would have liked this baff. some moments captured weel again. err daein him proud auld son. an mine on eer still young compared wi the fingers.


  • AnnD Moderators member
    January 27, 2007

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    Ahhh. past friends never leave us as long as we cherish their memories and the times we shared together.
    This is sad but gives a warm feeling too..

    Ann


  • Inside and out
    January 26, 2007

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    ahh, the memories of our youth. There are times in everyone's life that we would like to revisit. These times that you shared with your friend were probably ones that formed an incredible bond. This poem read sincere and honest. The tone was that of a man recalling the different events with a longing for the buddy sharing them. Well done. This poem is very touching.


  • Whoochi gold member
    January 26, 2007

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    aww

    what wonderful & cherished memories...you have....lucky Barney!!! i have some of those....thanks for reminding me and making me smile


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    January 26, 2007

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    Hey Man

    I've got one too... back in the 80's my ship was going through overhaul in Portland, Oregon. My steaming buddy was found in the Willamette River... his body thrown naked off a bridge. I don't think he even made it to 21 years old or just barely if he did. Lord only knows what sort of trouble he got into that night.

    We had gone AWOL together twice! Once in the Philippines for 8 days and then again for 30 in the States... traveled from Portland back east across the US in his big bomb of a car. I lost my wallet in Boise, we got turned around in Cheyenne, we stayed in Michigan for a week, then traveled down to Florida via a weeklong stop in North Carolina. We had like six eight-track tapes that we wore out... AC/DC, Molly Hatchet and REO among others.

    A lot of adventure in a short time. A week after his death, the guy that slept in the berth underneath me died in a hiking accident out on Mount Hood. I wonder what life could have held for each of them if they would have just turned right instead of left at some critical juncture.

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