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[this is what you get when the stars collide with romance.]

will you be my rock.god
     [with electric lullaby lips?]

 

&& i will be your nicoteen queen.

     [cancer lips && neon veins]

 

-baby, my cracked lips will whisper the sweetest lies you've ever heard-

 

[fairytales have gone stale]

     && this is the ending |scene|

 

....

 

 

will you be my Romeo

     [morphine traced with a paper ♥?]

 

&& i'll be your bleeding Juliet

     [cut out in imperfection && stitched in glitter sin]

 

((star.x.crossed lovers in this car.crash. wonderland))

 

[tragedy massacres happily ever after]

     && this is the ending |scene|

 

...

 

 

will you be my angel starr

     [cut from sugar lips && dusted in fairydust?]

 

&& i will be your glamour whore

     [washed up starlet lost in sequin nightmares]

 

-baby, the neon skies are crashing down

     && we're going (no where) fast-

 

[falling stars collide && wishes die]

     && this is the ending |scene|

 

 

 

 

 

(&& i slurred, "happy endings don't exist")

 

..(("if you start with [nothing], they do", you smiled))..

 

 

 

::fade to black::

because.

              .

                .

all we've got is nothing && Prince Charming doesn't believe in romance anymore.

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A contest entry

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Comments

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  • WishMeAway--x
    March 3, 2007

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    Loved this.

    The things you say in here...
    [falling stars collide && wishes die]

    && this is the ending |scene|

    Great job on this...i don't even know what else to say.

    ♥♥


  • denika
    January 30, 2007
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    nice i like this one really good read.


  • Moonshinesuicide
    January 30, 2007
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    ((star.x.crossed lovers in this car.crash. wonderland))


    love that sentence,theres so much meaning behidn it ts easy to forget how few words there are there, if that makes any sense, you convey it perfectly essentially,
    love it
    moonshine
    xxx


  • PersephoneInWinter
    January 27, 2007
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    i totally agree and i am going through the whole theme of this poem! its a little bit of a different format for you, but it works out really well. i like the different approaches that you use on the whole theme and stuff.

    i missed you ♥


  • Lauren Noir
    January 27, 2007
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    && i will be your glamour whore
    [washed up starlet lost in sequin nightmares]
    This was my fave little bit
    But all of the idea in this were brilliant

    Such a brillint piece
    Ammmmmazing

    Well done
    Good luck in the contest


  • Ohlympia
    January 26, 2007
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    "-baby, my cracked lips will whisper the sweetest lies you've ever heard-"

    I absolutely l o v e this. The format fits it beautifully && there's just enough repetition to make it really.hit.home. Wonderful

    ♥♥[ms.oblivion]


  • bird-mad girl
    January 26, 2007

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    Love it baby doll.

    You can be the Queen
    && I'll be the nicoTEEN© rockstarr
    [&& yes, we are a.maz.ing]

    This was [searchs for words] I don't know. I can't describe to you how much I love this. It was so transhied and ~insert dreamy sigh here~ flawless. Like the orginal Grimm fairytales [minus the murder]

    I loved this...
    like I love you
    [expect I love you wAAAAAAAy more]


  • Xx-emaculation-xX
    January 26, 2007

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    i loveddd everything about this poemm.. it flowed beautifully..you are a truly amazing poet.. please never stop writing..
    <3 shelby
    p.s love the name change=)


  • sweetpearl
    January 26, 2007

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    "will you be my rock.god
    [with electric lullaby lips?]"

    --I love these lines ... I have an obsession with music in poetry.

    "will you be my angel starr
    [cut from sugar lips && dusted in fairydust?]

    && i will be your glamour whore
    [washed up starlet lost in sequin nightmares]"

    --the words flow nicely here.


  • Lithium n lollipops
    January 26, 2007

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    will you be my Romeo

    [morphine traced with a paper ♥?]



    && i'll be your bleeding Juliet

    [cut out in imperfection && stitched in glitter sin]



    ((star.x.crossed lovers in this car.crash. wonderland))



    [tragedy massacres happily ever after]

    && this is the ending |scene|


    I loved this sweetie!
    A M A Z I N G write!
    <3<3<3 LollY


  • ohemeegeeay
    January 26, 2007
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    "&& i'll be your bleeding Juliet

    [cut out in imperfection && stitched in glitter sin]



    ((star.x.crossed lovers in this car.crash. wonderland))"

    Amazing, Sweets. Thanks for entering, and good luck!

    Noise&&Kisses

  • DanielleFace
    January 26, 2007
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    aw thove this is wonderfull

  • ohemeegeeay
    January 26, 2007

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    LoveLoveLove[&&l.o.v.e.]

    Amazing, Sweets. Whoever it is, I hope s/he says YES. They'd be a fool not to.

    Noise&&Kisses

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