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Predator
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I cackled as I flitted from my perch
Ravaged as I approached my feast
Vacant, the execution of my lurch
My euphoric endorphins released
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Circling, diving toward my pray
An instinctive flight you see
A lifeless carcass makes my day
My Blood stained feathered marquee
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I come on the breath of arid air
Pleasant is the stench of rotting flesh
Now with poignant suave way fair
As I tear at the sinewy enmesh
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As I devour the rancid dreams
Of my victim’s inner soul
Satisfied with lustful streams
Sustenance to keep me whole
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So I continue my daily search
I am the unholy avian church

 

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This is a modified Kryielle Sonnett

Dedicated to PerVirtuous, he loves sonnets.

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem.

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  • Gothik Prynce
    June 22, 2008
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    In some aspects you remind me of Dani from Cradle of Filth. Good job


  • Ithica silver member
    December 16, 2007

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    Funny how even the most unsavory topics take on a quality of beauty when they are melded into a lovely poetic form... Scavengers birds have become beautiful though your pen...


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 3, 2007

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    suave way fair

    This was so worth the read even if there was nothing beyond the use of those three words! But there is much here to enthrall and the last line is the best of all! Blue


  • Swan song gold member
    May 12, 2007
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    you show know your forms very good poem indeed.


  • Never Fall in Love
    February 23, 2007

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    Woah
    where are you going with so much vocab?
    oh .. i know your intentions
    you want me diving in the dictionary
    and drown for a while
    so i cant comment anymore

    lol, just kidding
    I'll go drown in the dictionary later ...
    its this sonnet you put me up with
    that amazes me
    and yea .. i want to know more
    *bookmarks*

    Never ♥


  • Trixie08
    January 27, 2007

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    This is the most beautiful sonnet I've read in a very long time you have this dark erotica vibe to it, it's very interesting and leaves you wanting to know more. I loved it for that it had this certain mystery about it. Great Write and I want to thank you for sharing it with all of us.


  • panegyric ink
    January 27, 2007

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    I have never even known such a beautiful sonnet such as this could be ever written!!! Definitely very awsomely Publishable with these, your thoughts here!!!


  • Im3
    January 26, 2007

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    Lighting strikes the weak

    people with thin skin should not read this, as it will pierce their soul, if they know reality. I love your work and what it represents. Your tastefulness surprises even me, as it is acquired through times of high stress. Make me see more please.


  • January 26, 2007

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    A wonderful tribute!

    This is a wonderful tribute to a great poet. Such strength in these lines...

    "As I devour the rancid dreams
    Of my victim’s inner soul
    Satisfied with lustful streams
    Sustenance to keep me whole"

    Impresive!

    Bravo!

  • darkmind4eva
    January 26, 2007
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    the imagry was wonderfull....keep writing poetry like this


  • PerVirtuous
    January 26, 2007

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    All I can say is...

    Eat me! Bitch! Ha ha ha. This is very interesting. The first stanza puts you in a state quite well symbolized and understood. The second stanza defines your search, and makes certain that you search for something that cannot fight back. I wonder what the psychological ramifications of this are? The third stanza is active. You are no longer thinking or waiting, you are taking action. I love the way it builds up towards a climax of you gaining sustenance. The couplet is very interesting as well. Especially the term unholy avian church. What I like about this is that it somehow has the feel an illusion. I can't quite put my finger on it, but I will continue to try. If I succeed, I will come back and comment again. Three tasty bunnies to feed the beast.


    • Amera gold member
      January 26, 2007

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      Oh my… I actually stumped the bastardly king of psychological intuition? I didn’t intend to bruise your male ego so please don’t take it that way.


      • PerVirtuous
        January 26, 2007
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        You cannot see me laughing as I typed my response? Good Lord! Have some faith, woman!


  • Manoura xx
    January 26, 2007

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    ANOTHER ONE OF YOUR KYRIELLE SONNET!!!!!!!!haha...i donno why im surprised..yhou have soo many of these..haha..but still...GREAT JOB HERE~!!!!!!!!!1

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