These circles of colour en masse
Their skin plucked from amongst grass
Reveal the inner most you encaptured
Within that heart of shiny brass
A contest entry
- Rubayi: quatrains by crimson rose 247.
400 points, ended February 3, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful rhymes! So much has been said in four lines...it will be difficult to live upto this level in your "5-line contest". Though I have entered, I'm afraid my poems isn't half as good.
Beautiful imagery! Exquisite vocabulary.
Great job!
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A lovely poem. congratulations on winning an HM. Good thing to try new forms and learn more about poetry and yaour abilities. Enjoyed the read.
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Lovely imagery. Another gem yet again! I wish you the best of luck in the contest. You certainly have talent and know how to use it.
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I really like this poem. It's short and i love the rhyming, keep it up.
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beautiful, yet another depiction created from nature. i love entries of such kind, the make one pause and think on the possible meaning behind it. good luck in the competition and may i read many submission form you.. keep writing and keep painting with words.
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