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Kiss

A trace of grace in your face,

Sudden motion of emotion,

Comes with the realisation that your eyes are stationed,

On my facial passions,

Temptation tempered by frustration,

Your eyes waver from their station – what’s my interpretation?

An ocean of elation,

As my gradual progression to your facial creation,

Goes un-cautioned,

Our lips meet in a mutation of elation,

Lotion salves my temptation, soothes frustration,

Kiss.

A contest entry

Any feedback is much appreciated!

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Comments

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  • Abscessed
    February 8, 2007

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    Eloquant language and you've really expressed this union well :) Thank you for entering the contest I wish you luck and welcome you to All Poetry! *rose*abscessed

  • Violet Moodswing gold member
    February 6, 2007
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    Welcome to AP

    Very well done. It is easy to imagine this poem being read aloud. I like the overabundance of rhyme as it keeps a rhythm going that is easy for the reader to follow. It gave me a smile and brought to mind some nice memories.

    Best of luck in the contest.

  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    January 30, 2007
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    Thanks for entering

    A unique write on your first kiss. Your style of writing is refreshing and an absolute pleasure to read as it maintains its flow and rhythm to the end.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary

  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    January 30, 2007
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    Thanks for entering

    A very unique interpretation of a first kiss. Almost sound clinical or military to me. lol Thanks for sharing.

    Good in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment

    God Bless
    Tammy

  • Dove
    January 26, 2007
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    Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!

    A very clear description of a kiss, my tongue twisted somewhat while working my way to the ending tough. A fun read, nice job Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove


    • nish81
      January 27, 2007
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      Thanks!

      Thanks for the comment, I really appreciate it. Maybe, I overdid the rhyme on this one, but that was my aim really.

      Thanks again!
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