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Dance

Dancing is like floating on a cloud
Spinning around and around. You can block any one around you and dance your heart out, and get a partner join them.
Dance like no ones wacthing. Dance with a friend, a group, dance with some one you trust.

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  • Diatribes
    November 4, 2007
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    I would guess dancing is your anti-drug verb huh


  • Amera gold member
    January 26, 2007

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    (curtsey) great stuff m’Lady, your talent does us honor. Imagery and flow is wonderful. Just a few suggestions if I may? Drop the capital letter on spinning and correct the spelling of watching.A comma isn’t ever used before the word “and”. See if you like the way I changed the structure to make it more aesthetically artistic.






    Dancing is like floating on a cloud
    spinning around and around.

    You can block any one around you
    and dance your heart out
    and get a partner join them.

    Dance like no ones watching.
    Dance with a friend,
    a group

    dance with some one you trust.

    Love, your humble servant. Princess Amera