Sweat
Sweat drops off my zealous brow
As from our play passion grow
Deep within me my passion swells
Dripping forth as I caress your welts
I smell your hunger and touch those lips
Lovingly, slowly into you my finger dips
I feel your need and my body complies
Escaping our lips are simultaneous sighs
I gasp for air as you begin to thrust
These feelings are more than mere lust
In a heightened frenzy I let out a scream
You open your eyes, this is not a dream
Falling to my knees I taste your desire
My craving for you, a burning wild fire
Your body vibrates, your knees give in
My tongue slides back and I begin to rim
Your body rocks in an orgasmic eruption
As our bodies unite in triumphant unison
Please tell me what you think
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So I know what I'll be doing tonight. *pictures vibrator* Great write, Ang. ily and miss you!
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miss you too my sweety pie
ang
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Very simply an oh so lovely read!!!!
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thank you for reading and commenting fallower
ang
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BRILLIANT PIECE
MAGNIFICENT WRITING. THIS WAS JUST FANTASTIC. I LOVED THE RHYME, THE FLOW, THE IMAGERY WAS SUPERB. AND ANG, I WAS THERE WITH YOU AGAIN. YOU TOOK ME WITH YOU HERE. VREY VERY EROTIC AND HOT PIECE OF WRITING. YOU ARE THE BEST AT THIS TYPE OF WORK. NO ONE CAN BEAT MY ANG.
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*BLUSH*
thank you so much for your WONDERFUL comment my dear brother you always bring a smile to my face
ang
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Sigh..I really want to feel this again. I guess i'm lossing my spark. This is very good my friend.
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my dearest Kai, i dont think its a matter of loosing one's spark, its more like your spark taking a short vacation. mine did for about 5 months!!!!! (my muze kidnapped my libido and f**ed off together, rather rude if you ask me
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keep your faith up my dearest friend
ang
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Wow
that's hot.... I'm struggling to type.
I was expecting you to be at the CM poetry moot. it is a great pity that you weren't there to share you BDSM poetry. BL was expecting you I was looking forward to seeing you too.
I think these are my favorite lines in the poem
I feel your need and my body complies
Escaping our lips are simultaneous sighs
I gasp for air as you begin to thrust
I'm glad to see you haven't lost your touch!
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thanks for commenting
ang
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A poem with the essence of love and the presence of lovemaking the fruitful culmination of a love treasured to please seize and release..a love poem well done...great stuff..Shubs
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I would like to see this written again but without the rhyme. I liked the content but felt that you were hindered my the rhyme.
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thank you for reading and commenting it could be interesting for me to re-write it, although if i do its more likely to come out as a story!
thanks again for commening
ang
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This is quite a sexy poem. I agree though that the rhyme and rhythm is a little bit off... still, it's a great poem.
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thank you for reading and commenting, as i said below, rhyming is not my strong point, but i do try.
ang
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This was nice but the rhyming is off in several places and your rythym isn't steady. I would look this over and do some editing and this could be a very well done piece. Your close now, with a little work this will be excellent.
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thank your for reading and commenting, rhyming is not one of my strong points, although i do try
ang
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WoooHooo
This is hot stuff Ang!!
Very well done indeed
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thank you Lexie, i tried to write something erotic without all the crude words!!! i think i succeeded
ang
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HELP!!!!!
Ok so I can dream for this to be me, or that it would actually happen.
Again it is awesome you took me on that memorable journey with you each step of the way..
Add yet another feather to your cap, and a rose to your heart.
Well done, my sweet sweet love
Now i wish i were dead
Your Captain forever
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dont wish that ML, i still want and need you around!... so do you have any idea who it was written for?
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Well I may as well be for all the good it does me. Yes I think I know who you were writting about. I want and need you around too ML but I think in a different way.
Love your work as always
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