I awoke last night to the sound of Thor
moving about in his 'up-there' apartment.
Others were there too, I think; lumbering, inept;
judging by the noise of what they dropped.
and the bright torchlight they flashed around
while searching for what had been clumsily let fall.
One, more bungling than the rest,
carelessly carrying Thor's water jar,
must have tripped and spilled its contents,
judging by what fell on my roof.
Still, it's Thursday and that time of year, isn't it?
Shenton
Author notes
Option #1 anything really
A contest entry
- A Sound of Thunder by Mystikrypton.
411 points, ended February 22, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Quite a unique take on this challenge - what we tell our kids about thunder and how it works - mythology also has it's reasons.
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Clever is the word to describe this piece. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this short poem. If I had any suggestion, I would say that the word "clumsy" has been slightly overused. Also, the lines: "Still, it's that time of year, I suppose Isn't it?" could be stronger somehow. Other than that, this was a great piece. Thank you for submitting it in this appropriate contest for it and good luck.
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that was very cleverly written. i enjoyed that. and it is that time of the year too where i'm at. good job and good luck in the contest.
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