the only one i've ever loved
has left this place and me behind
i thought he knew how much i cared
but it wasn't enough to save him from death.
so now i wander the streets alone
doing anything to erase you from my mind
anything to numb the pain
of being abandoned once again.
we had plans to start a new life
already starting a family of our own
you told me it would work out, wait and see
but now you're no longer here
and my family of 3 is now down to but 2.
i don't think i can raise him all on my own
i don't even want to if you're not here, too
so instead i'll abandon him just like before
cause now there is no point to life anymore.
i'll bottle up everything until it all explodes
leaving me in a bloody mess on this cold, hard floor
cause i can't take this without you here
i want to join you, eternally without fear.
so i'm finishing the job that i started way back
and putting the barrel to my head
only this time, i'm going through with t
because from the second i lost you
i was already dead.
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mydarksecrets
ii)Word Bank #1&5
A contest entry
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525 points, ended November 23, 2007, 29 entries
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Holy shit! this is amazing and OMG so powerful! I'm so sorry that you fell this way but don't give up and yes i know how incredibly corny that sounds but its true! This is a fantastic peice
Goodluck!
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Becca, i love you. no matter what i say, i will always ALWAYS be here for you. Ive told you, i WILL NOT leave you. Ever EVER. the only way is for you to tell me to go. even then, i will still love you and be there for you any way that i can be.
yours forever,
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Excellent
Truly a nightmare, one I feel I have lived before. You did a great job, This expresses the real pain of this nightmare.
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i'm going through with t
because from the second i lost you
i was already dead.
Ahh..very touching and very deep worded write is here...The dillema and its picture is very well pointed out here...The beauty of this write lies in its focus where you are pointing out a flash of the soul which is lost in the journey of this great life and in its miseries as well where every one of us at
point of time is supposed to realise it as well..Indeed a very beautiful and heartfelt write...
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Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest and the best of luck to you.
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I thought that it was a really touching poem and i can kind of relate because i have a baby boy and his father just doesn't care that i am here for him and i love him and i want to be with him for the rest of my life. He ditches us and we are all screwed and it hurts just like how i felt when i read the poem. Good Job and keep up the good work!!
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very deep
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so much pain..i can feel it though the words!!!
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this is a very poweful nightmare.Scary. Duh, its a nightmare. The fear of loosing a loved one, its awful. I dont wish it on anyone. Great write.
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