My last few seconds of life weren't splendid
We drank a few too many beers
The car drove off the cliff, now the three of us are dead.
My spirit is now in this weird room
Nothing but grey walls and floor
There arn't any doors and a sense of pending doom
I'm all alone, my friends missing
I curl up into a ball in the corner
I want nothing bad to happen, I'm wishing
A blinding flash of light
And I see another being with
White wings and shining bright
Another flash of light now black
Another being to match the frist
But instead of being bright, it's dark
Their eyes lock on each other
Than move to my spirit's body
The black one smiles and steps closer
It reaches out a hand and touches my shoulder
Icy waves and burning pains through my body
It laughs and picks me up and takes me through an ivisible door
I scream and fight agaisnt it trying
To break free and run away it's resisting
My pounding fists and now I'm crying
I see more of these dark angels or demons
With other tourmented souls on their shoulders
Every last one's screams are for freedom
It puts me down in another hallway and cakles
I quiet down so that I can think
And take off down the twisting and winding halls
Loud crashes of thunder and spliting plaster
Sound around me as I run farther and farther
I feel fire on my back and run faster and faster
Vines with the longest thornes I've ever seen
And barbed wire shoot out and try to ensnare
I dodge to the best of my ability but am cut and start to bleed
I keep running but realized the sound of wings
I glance back, a big mistake,
And see the blackest of all these flying demons
It lets out a shriek of pure pain and agony to my ears
It's louder than anything, I can't hear the other screams
I then take a right and run down blacked halls, holding back tears
The creature's call fades just as the other screams grow louder
I run past things I wish I'd never have to see
Scenes of punishment,of flaugings, and most of all, torture
I cry out in anguish, to nothing in particular
And take yet another turn, I've no idea where I'm going
I sigh with relief when I see a garden, although it's peculiar
I settle under one of the many large trees and relax
I leaned back agaisnt it, letting myself rest
Then the ground shudders and I see a monster's back
It's taller than anything that I've ever seen
It's eyes as red as blood and teeth covered in the stuff
The shadow figure's large talons wrap around a terified me
The beast hisses long and low and it's tounge touches my face
It's talons start burning and searing my skin
As much as I strugle it only smiles and laughs
My screams become more and more frantic
As it takes me through its shadow doors
It seemes like an eternity, and hope I'm without it
Flashes of fire, ice, thornes, and blood
Go past my eyes as it takes me to someplace of torture
We stop in a large throne room and it drops me on the floor
I see a being upon the throne up high
The most beautiful thing I've ever seen
But my opinion changes dramaticly when I see his smile's lie
He just points over my head and then
A mass of demons grab my arms
They drag me down this hall. I'm full of dread
Two very large forboding doors
Fly open and the screams grow deafly louder
My scream is added, the doors close, and I will be heard no more
Author notes
I had a dream about hell and this is it...enjoy
20...srry its long...
A contest entry
- The Darkest Day by Baahltres.
2000 points, ended February 13, 2007, 33 entries
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Comments
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Whoa...
This was a dream?! Holy crap!!! God this was dark!!! *shudder*
Very very very freaky! I may just kill myself if I had this dream such horrific things! You should consider then, maybe, just maybe, this dream was a message telling you to change something about how you live your life? =/
Good luck and great write!!!
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i just decided everyone in my contest is going to get 1 applause... so here's yours!
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I absolutly love it!!!!!!!!!! it is awesome! i like the word usage u had, it flowed very well. it was long, but totally worth reading, of all ur poems r worth reading. great job!


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Wow, that would be a creepy dream. I like the imagery that you give throughout the whole poem, although somehow, there are parts where the emotion isn't quite coming through. At the end, the emotion is good, but as the person is running through the halls, the emotion seems to be lacking. All in all though, a great poem!
Thank you for entering and good luck!!!
~.~Yvonne~.~
Baahltres



