If all is lost upon the seas ,
of ever lasting tide.
Where is he that churns the waves,
or does this vast moon hide?
Upon a birth a star is born
it glistens in the sky.
Upon a death that star will fade
without a reason why.
Foot prints sink into the depths
in quicksand on the beach.
Shifting ever slightly now,
in dreams we cannot breach.
Who is the watcher of our seas,
where do our souls ascend?
How many prayers, paved the way,
Or is life just all pretend?
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Hoodwinked!
Great work on this poem! It had a very lord of the ringsy feel for me, and a great flow and rhyme that remained steady throughout... great imagery and wonderfully chosen phrasing to convey your message, great work!
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Thank you
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TWO THUMBS UP!
Hailed my two thumbs up in the air by your writing. Wished i had many more such to truly show you how beautiful and thoughtful the poem is. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem. -
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Thanx!
That means alot!
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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I loved this content & style ...
Very interesting questions put together here in poetical pondering. I love thinking about these things and usually can feel that spirit move within me and say, "Later Joy, you don't need to know now!" Oh boy! I think ... joy
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Shifting ever slightly
This is a beautiful poem well written and speaks of truths beyond our beliefs .Captivating and wonderful all in one .speaks of decending for another new star to be born powerful penmanship loved it loved it loved it look forward to others from youId give you 100 applauds but used them all up since im new here again great write -
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Thanx!
Wow.....Thats a powerful statement!
Thanx for reading!
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Brilliant
i really loved this poem. it has a wonderful rhythm to it and there's a lot of meaning behind it too! "of ever lasting tide" i love that - it really frames life for me. the other line that really hit home was "how many prayers, paved the way?" that's really beautiful!
great job! really enjoyed reading it!
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i indeed like the way you play with the idea of somebody is watching, like every single personen is a muppet in a big puppet show. i wish you the best in the content
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Interesting
Or is life just all pretend. I really like this line. It hits me hard, because i'm into philosophy and I question myself that sometimes. The whole poem overall, is wonderful, but the last four lines really hit home. So good jo -
I just stopped by to read it again
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This was very thought provoking and good! I loved it
The best of luck to you in the contest.
Kari
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Sometimes i wonder if life is pretend or some higher beings game they play like monopoly Excellent poem
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thanks
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