eyes shine
red
ripe
thin skin
easy to pierce
sweetness
into a mouth
warm
juice dribbles
down soft lips
onto a dimmpled chin
love renewed
innocence lost
Author notes
Apples are absolute beauty personified
A contest entry
- Anything goes. by still.she.waits.
600 points, ended April 1, 2008, 113 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Yes apples are beautiful personification. Nicely captured with good imagery. Too bad I don't have any right now!
Nice flow as well. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck in the contest.
Leance
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This is quite good (in my humble opinion.)
You've captured a lot in a few words. Both that feeling of frailty and of desire. I guess with my needs, something is lost, in this case innocence.
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wow vampiric and devient but a sence of love and erotica to
"juice dribbles
down soft lips"
this is a very good segment that has a beautiful feeling -
That a great apple. Now I want an apple. I need to go to the store. Great write and descriptive. Great imagery.Can you give me feedback on my poem Love of my life.
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