Once again, my love denied -
Once again he turns aside,
and once again he left me,
Yet again he left me.
So long has he been on my mind,
Thoughts of him from day to night -
and on my own, I try to hide
the love for him that rests inside.
Sometimes at night, when I'm asleep,
I visit him, and in my dreams
he comforts me and keeps me safe,
Comforts me, gves me peace...
But only in my dreams, he's there.
He never really seems to care,
about me, but I know that one day
He will see. And one day I won't be
On my own...
A contest entry
- Les Miserables by Starcrossed Dreamer.
450 points, ended January 31, 2007, 6 entries
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Comments
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Not too bad. Eponine is also my favorite character. She's so easy to relate to, and you did a relatively good job of getting her feelings across. Thank you for entering, and good luck!
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the rhyme feels forced, but other than that its great...lots ofgood imagery, but i totaly get stuck on the rhyme
but its a good write, keep up the good work <3
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