Love, light someone at my door
his stature framed in dark oak wood
Love, be my saviour this night
send a graceful gentleman my way
Love, elevate me in your lustre for a spell
let your Goddess bless his harmony of soul
Love, let this be
my kismet song.
Please tell me what you think
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Of course there is only one true God, so if its figurative it should be "gods." That first stanza was killer, you could just this guy standing in the doorway; I bet you were hot picturing that in your mind, weren't you girl? Liked your second stanza too, your unique use of words for description awakens your reader; and the use of the word graceful tells me you want someone slow and easy and romantic. In the third stanza "lustre" what a great word to use, pure genius on your part girl - pure genius! (a bright and shinning lust - yee haw!) In the next line I was kinda confused with the word "his" I kinda was thinking along the line of "our" but that's just me. Love that last short stanza, and the word kismet.
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Interesting.
My first impression is of someone that is longing for love. Emotionally I can feel her reaching out for that illusive dream. There is nothing awkward about this therefore nothing to be changed. My favorite part is the second verse. I do not have any part that i dislike. The title is very good,and the first line makes you wonder who she will find to give her what she wants. The last line tells just what this poem is all about. I liked it.
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