Frozen sweat falls of my heart
as red like the lips of love
What paintbrush was used to
blush my eyes
and tickle the toes of my nature?
Is it love
for my ears
have been blind to the voice
of its calling?
For years my heart has been by
the nectar of my joy
and love never told me
have never told me but NOW
now when I can't see
its lips
any more?...
Author notes
This is a poem I wrote about my best friend who I found out today that he likes me but he told me when I moved to another school. My family is strict so I will never get to see again until I graduate I will only hear his lovely voice on the telephone.
Written February 18th, 2006
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ok I love your poem, totally top material
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excellent very good
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bitter-sweet...but then sooner or later love usually is.
Very nice, Aurielle. May I suggest, though, that you take a minute and reread "Now" carefully: there are one or two errors in spelling and maybe one or two little awkward "turns of phrase".Just give it a little "tweek".
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A beautiful written piece A friend is a true blessing in life. For they are few, Thank you for sharing
LISA
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Hey girl! This is another one! This was very soft and sweet and when I read your author notes, all I could say was awww!!! Keep writing!! I didn't even know you were in the DIVA's group. Welcome!
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This is really sweet and beautiful. I like it a lot.
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Sweet and sensual write
Aurielle, lovely as can be.
You are indeed very talented and I hope to find your posting more often in the group to share the Beauty of your soul.
Ephiphany
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Lovely write and your words are so powerful and it was wonderful to read.
Keep on writing
And always trust in your pen
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this is a really powerful write, and i love the image it creates. greta job!
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Well at least you have the telephone, that is better than nothing at all and if he loves you he will wait Love, C
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oh, I know what that's like, to have someone you consider a friend like you and never know it until *pow* they knock you over with it...though never as abrubtly so far away as that....I really like the ending "and love never told me
have never told me but NOW
now when I can't see
its lips
any more?.......... " it's a great image, and it conveys great confusion
thank you for the entry
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Excellent Job
Oh, how I recall those days with such fondness, when I was young my boyfriend and I broke up because of distance. Now it makes me laugh since it was only 1 mile. But we had to WALK back then LOL. Beautiful write. I enjoyed it. Keep the ink flowing...
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Bravo
Ah, soooooo roooooomantic! Neat and nifty and deftly done...short, perhaps, but oh, so sweet...another jewel by the jewel known as Aurielle! bravo! bravo! bravo!
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