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Bathe in my Tears

Bathe in my ocean dearest
Ocean of tears I have shed over you
Secure yourself in my pain
Cling to the shallow solitude
As my memory starves you of oxygen
And deprives you of voice

Reunite with your senses
Swim to the depths of my ocean
Dark, deep, forbidden
Let the reminding misery swallow you
The misery you yourself has caused
Allow me to take you down

Realize
There is no bottom
No ground, no end
To this ocean
The ocean of fearful tears you made me shed
No bottomless pit
To this continuing reaction of despair
Nor' is there a death for this rising and building hate

Bathe in my ocean dearest
Longer, as long as you can
I will force you under
Swallowing and perfecting you
Into what you need to be
Bathe greedily dearest
Bathe in the ocean you motivated me to make
It's only fair

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Username" Bleeding Eternal
AKA: Courtney

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  • a-face-in-the-crowd
    February 7, 2008

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    Oo

    I loved this poem. You use some really powerful imagery, and this poem is just seeped in emotion. I really liked the use of the ocean metaphor all the way through the poem, I thought that it worked really well. Fantastic.
    Thanks for entering my contest!
    x


  • BonaFidePoet
    December 2, 2007

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    Wow interesting read. I love all of the verbs you used, like drowning and bathing, and the fact that you used an ocean. Very good work indeed.


  • star girl
    August 22, 2007
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    nice....i love this poem.keep up the good work.


    • Bazza
      August 22, 2007
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      Then can I enquire why it was removed ??


  • Ale E
    July 29, 2007
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    I liked it. It was a good read. Thank you for entering. Best of luck in my contest.


  • x Bright Eyes x
    May 27, 2007

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    hi i thought this was very good i could feel the emotion in this and i enjoyed reading this thank you for entering and wish you the best of luck


  • Haunted Doll
    May 23, 2007

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    very cool. had a love/hate going on. thanks for the entry and best of luck. this i shall read again


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    May 2, 2007

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    this was a really great write and i really enjoyed reaidng this..your words were powerful and emotional keep writting your talented

    ~Chrissy~


  • Athena Xymaya
    January 27, 2007
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    This is so deep and moving that I am crying.
    So much pain and anger.
    I know what this all feels like and I am sorry that someone such as yourself had to go through that kind of pain.

    Amazingly Beautiful poem.
    Keep writing!!
    It's your gift!!!


    ~Dea


    Thank you, for sharing this work of art


  • DropDeadChristina
    January 26, 2007

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    Nice.

    I like it. I think you did a nice job. I like your choice of words you used. Lots of nice metaphors.


  • DarlingUnwrapMexx
    January 26, 2007

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    This poem is so sad and I love it. I also love your use of words and the way it flows. Keep up the great work and never stop writing!

    Lana


  • Hearts.That.Bleed
    January 26, 2007

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    Wow this poem was stunning. I loved the flow of it. The words and description of the topic was brilliant. Anyone who reads this will find it hard not to cry for you. I loved it

    XxChelseaxX

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