Hello my dear
Pull up a chair and sit right down
Have you ever had a woman
Speak to you words of love
Whispers of desires, lustful passions
With fantasies thought off
Before we will pursue
We will take a break
Have a cup of coffee or a tea
Have a glass of beer or sweet wine
Have a slice of strawberry pie
With a dollop of whipped cream
Take a taste
If you want raspberries
Without a thought
I will give you all
I press raspberries into your right hand
And blueberries into your left
Curling your fingers
Squeezing until the juice runs down your wrists
I’ll slide my tongue along your palms
Do you like the taste
Do you want more
Don’t shake your head
Now we will go further
Have you ever had a woman
Make passionate love totally to you
To awaken your desires
As she makes all your fantasies come true
To map your strong body
To massage your hairy chest and your back
With her hands and her tongue
A kiss so soft but passionate
And If that's not enough
She kneels down
Give her a psalm to sing
It sweeps you off your feet
Spending many hours
Inspiring and sedating your lust
Creating deep in your heart with love and trust
To show that you’ll never
For a moment have to doubt
Of devoted fidelity or what true love is all about
To be your best friend and lover
To be the architect of your smiles
Is just one of her many roles
Or helping you to reach for the stars
And attaining all your goals
Whatever you ask for
Will be sealed with a kiss
If you ever choose to risk loving
A simple women like me
This is me, all I am
All my heart will ever desire to pursue
I can find in simply loving you
What else do I need to do
To have you notice me
So my dearest love, to you I write
This poem to tell you
The love I hold for you
Ten thousand kisses I promise you
With all of my love multiplied by two
Have I awoken your wonder
Now it’s all up to you
The choice is yours
Author notes
~Fallenangelgrace~
A contest entry
- What do you Feel by Tercil.
300 points, ended February 13, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Disgruntled by Raelin.
450 points, ended February 21, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seduce Me With Words by shysky.
425 points, ended April 3, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Sex poems ever:Enter as many as you Like i want a 100 by cali951.
1300 points, ended August 18, 2007, 49 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options For Love by lesbian-in-love.
475 points, ended October 30, 2007, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seduce Me, Make Me Cry, Make Me Love... by near1202apocalypse.
450 points, ended October 21, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Impress Me by Crook Oneil.
1200 points, ended October 27, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes. by still.she.waits.
600 points, ended April 1, 2008, 113 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful. The words are pure seduction and i love how personal it is. I alos love how you portrayed the complete devotion a woman has for a man. I really enjoyed this one. I especially loved this line:
Ten thousand kisses I promise you
With all of my love multiplied by two
Have I awoken your wonder
Now it’s all up to you
The choice is yours
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very well done. i liked this poem quite a bit. definately a different point of view than my own
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This made me feel like your actually talking to me! Fantastic!
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That my friend is very well written. The usage of words was great it just reels you in to read the rest. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck to you.
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this is grand
where can I get me one
ohhhh no nevermind do not tell
Riftkin -
Sounds like I wont go hungry.More time to stay in bed.Great write
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I loved this seduction with words. Any man should be pleased to have you if you are willing to do all this. I enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest. Hugs~ Cuddles
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Well I have read a lot of great poems and I wanted the finalist pick the winners.....now I'm not saying I want you to read every finalist but if you could read some poems and let me know if you think you should win let me know also thansk
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A very well written poem, thank you for entering and good luck!
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oh! this is really unique. I love the originality of this piece. A very unique trip through a land of carnal pleasures and desires. *smiles* great write, and good luck in the contest.
Although, just a tiny tip of advice, a little punctuation would make this one a piece of sinful art! Great job. -
aweome of course hun. I loved it
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I like this poem from beginnign to the end good job and oh yea nice poem
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I love it. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
Emerald Fire
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Gorgeous and seductive; I loved how different this is from other entries I got.
However, I wish you had added what I requested in the notes. You could have won a trophy. -
This piece is very seductive and has left me hungry,,,lol thanks for the entry and good luck to you.
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I loved this piece and it's very beautiful. Thank you for your entry and best of luck in the contest.
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This is a very sweet and tender tale of two people so in love.. however.. I have to say that you are being quite greedy on the trophies here hon. You won one of every color with this write .. I think it is time you retire this one and move on to bigger and better things
I have only done this once.. with one of my poems.. If it were just HM's that is different.. but actual places.. I can gurantee this will not win my contest just for that reason.. I mean if it had only one trophy.. that is one thing.. but 3? I dunno hon. You might want to look into writing something new in this type of write or something. Sorry 
~Krys~
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Barty very impressed with huge quantity of hardware you got for this poem. Barty prefers his erotics stronger, more explicit. Hopes you come read him soon!
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Hot! Hot! Hot! I can see how you've won so many trophies with this poem.. I'm sure some had to take a cold shower to put out the flames. Awesome write, very sensual, a turn on accomplishment. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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This was perfection without a doubt in my mind. You've captured everything i was looking for and made me hunger for someone to lick the juices from my palms as the berries were soaking into my skin. This was love incarnate, a beautiful experience treasured for all that it was. The choice is mine. I choose You.
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i wanted this one to be a winner... but you already have trophies for it and i didnt think it was fair... it is a very beautiful and breath taking right... great overall job and i envy your writing ability
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outstanding
wow, im not even sure what to leave her.. that was wow... perfect description, strong emotions and a clear picture.. great job... i REALLY enjoyed that write babe -
Hairy Chest?
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Well written, even though I said no erotica this wasn't too much and came close to crossing the line but was a great poem without crossing it. I imaged everything besides the knee part because I didn't think that was all that right lol. Anyways it was a good poem and flowed really well, message me if you want your score and include the name of your poem. Thanks for entering.
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I am flattered that this is the 10th contest you entered this poem in. It's not at all bad but you won't win.
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Thanks for this very good entry... more thoughts and questions than action, but still very good. Thanks and good luck!
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Is there any masturbation going on here?
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Looks like they were entering adult contests at random.
But don't worry, I'll write you something.
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In the contest "make me fall in love with you"...
You win, I LOVE YOU!. Beautifully done, soft sensuous and sweet.
Buddy
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wow
Great write here. um... i am speechless. it was beautiful. my fav lines were,"To be your best friend and lover
To be the architect of your smiles"
keep up the good work.
-AkaBaki
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Wow...
...This was very indepth and erotic. I really enjoyed the flow of your poem and the way it just moved so nicely. Very good write. Thanks for entering and the best of luck to you. Kassie -
you are making me insane in love
this is incredibly hot i never saw raw emotion s like these before i hope to see you red hot chilled in a can of chilly sause upon the waterbed in the middle of the sea where we .....
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A very beautiful write. Well done keep them coming and blessed be.
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Feels like a tribute piece, which is nice, but more specifically nice to the person it's written to or about. I almost felt as if I were reading very mild poetry erotica. lol. I kept expecting to see something like "licking a bosom" or something. I was also a little confused by the whole raspberry/blueberry thing. Not sure why it's even there, what it's supposed to tell me. I'm sure you have a reason for it, I just didn't see it in the poem itself.
In one line you have "a simple women like me", which I imagine is a typo and should read "woman".
It was a cute poem, but not exactly containing the kind of depth I generally look for. That doesn't make it bad or good, just not specifically to my tastes. I could offer suggestions and that kind of thing, but this is a kind of poem written for a specific purpose with a specific approach in mind. I appreciate that and wouldn't want to encourage you to change it to suit my tastes.
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This is a great write and I think this is what we all really want and you put it perfectly excellently penned
Bravo
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pretty hot and tempting
not only are you beautiful, so is your writing.
i took the bronze and was wondering how i lost the silver and gold.
your poem is fantastically sensual and tastefully erotic. great job and congratulations on your trophy.
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Pretty awesome!
This is dancing with hands, and what a handstand this is, this I feel is so subtle, it may take an age to undertsand this poet, I feel truth, loyalty and charm in this person, and I am sure I am right. I asked for romantic and not crude and this certainly hold s in that respect, perfectly spoken a tribute to you for subtleness.
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This is awesome! I love the passion and devotion in this write. The music and picture fit your poem so well. Great work here!
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this is just stunning.... totally stunning. you have done a fantastic job on this and it shows by the emotions that come out of it... i wish you well with the contest
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awesome
this is so passionate and beautiful...I have experienced those things in my lifetime...so I know how intense the feelings are...this write is awesome Grace...beautifully written...smile...hugs and love, David
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Wowww....
And If that's not enough
She kneels down
Give her a psalm to sing
It sweeps you off your feet
Spending many hours
Inspiring and sedating your lust
You always seem to know all the right words to say and you seem to say them at the right time.....is it coinidence or for a reason?
I think it is........
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A heartbreaker in poetic form. So sensual and loving are the words of your making. An architecct of smiles definately. An absolute stunning poem Grace. I love it, especially the quoted form below...
Of devoted fidelity or what true love is all about
To be your best friend and lover
To be the architect of your smiles
Is just one of her many roles
Beautiful, just Beautiful
Jeffro -
"A kiss so soft but passionate" I can taste love on you Grace. Fantastic poem.
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