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Brave Wolf - (Villanelle)

 

Soon they shall all disappear

But they shall not give up without a fight

They stand proud and show no fear

 

They roam with the graceful deer

Both quiet and gentle in the night

Soon they shall all disappear

 

To imagine nature without them brings a tear

Nature will lose a brave and splendid sight

They stand proud and show no fear

 

Loss of them for nature would be severe

Freedom for these creatures of sure delight

Soon they shall all disappear

 

That which beacons my soul I see quite clear

Awareness of their extinction I hope to ignite

They stand proud and show no fear

 

Brave wolf always stay near

Hopefully man will do what’s right

Soon they shall all disappear

They stand proud and show no fear

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Villanelle form, my first attempt.

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  • TrippinBTM
    November 25, 2008

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    I usually don't like villanelles, but this one got me. I love the ending, it came together just right. Well played, sir (or ma'am).


  • Sonja
    October 28, 2007

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    After this poem I fell so useless because I can't do nothing to change this kind of human attitude - to destroy whatever could be destroyed - the most precious life and natures beauty. I like this poetical form very much (although I do not write it for personal reason) because it always give us something more, like a heart or drums beat - rhythm of life.
    ~Sonja~

  • Virgoan
    September 27, 2007

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    This is my first time to read this poem. I will be re-reading all the entries like I usually do.

    Initial score = 9.6

    Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.

    VIRGOAN


  • wolfcub
    June 21, 2007
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    I don't particularly like villanelles - i find them hard to follow because of the 'odd' rhyming, but this is a very good one. I love the imagery and descriptions in this, and you have a very important message in it as well.
    Thankyou for entering and good luck in my contest
    Katie


  • k2vet
    February 1, 2007
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    Beautiful

    'To imagine nature without them brings a tear

    Nature will lose a brave and splendid sight'
    I really agree with these lines. Becuase they are so feared and so many animals are disappearing it really would be a shame to lose the wolf. Good Luck!


  • dreamdragon6484
    January 30, 2007
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    awsome

    this is a great poem. people nned to be more aware, for it will be a great loss. good luck


  • Puppydog gold member
    January 27, 2007

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    A BEAUTILFUL TRIBUTE TO THE MIGHTY WOLF

    The wolf is one who is devoted to family they care so much for their young ones and their mates, only a few animals do that in nature


  • Kari gold member
    January 27, 2007

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    Yikes..this was chilling and deep. I loved it. You did wonderful and that graphic is unique. The best of luck to you in the contest.
    Kari


  • sunny day
    January 26, 2007
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    It didn't take the applauses when I edited!


  • sunny day
    January 26, 2007
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    Lovely

    spirit, Sorry about that one I hit the wrong key there and it entered my comment before writing it. This is a lovely Villanelle that you have penned here for the contest. You captured the subject brilliantly and your words flowed effortlessly throughout. I want to wish you the very best in the contest and thank you for sharing with all of us. Love and God bless, Joyce

  • bethbooklover
    January 25, 2007

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    I like the fifth stanza the best. I liked how you made the narrator (persona) whimsical, and at the same time, fighting for a cause. I like the way you rhymed the beginnings with the ends. Good Job!

  • Grin
    January 25, 2007

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    Very good

    Interesting poem here, you know something? I felt like I was reading something a native american wrote. That's the feel I got out of it. I really like this poem it's strong without being pushy...you get your message across without violence. I like "freedom for these creatures of sure delight" and "both quiet and gentle in the night"
    Also it's neat how you placed a poem within a poem so to speak by having the second line rhyme in each stanza.
    I enjoyed this poem alot. It's good.


  • wolfman7
    January 25, 2007

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    Beautifully written, I really enjoyed this poem. it is truly sad to think that this beautiful creature is so close to becoming extinct and that so many people have a hatred toward them. again beautiful poem.


  • Spiritual Nature
    January 25, 2007

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    Well done, I think you get the gist of the picture quite well. I like the 2nd stanza best, I think. Good job.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    January 25, 2007

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    Oh what a sad sight that would be, wolves have such a mystic aura to them, they are such beautiful creatures.
    I have not seen this form before so I cannot critique on it as such, but it almost has a mirrored feel to it.
    I am assuming the repetition is a part of the actual form, I will have to look this form up and see how it is done as this was a unique read for me.
    good luck in your contest and keep speaking out for those beautiful creatures.
    Suzi


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    January 25, 2007

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    Great job my friend on this one. I love this form. I havent tried it out myself but you did a wonderful job with it. You did a great job relating to the picture with your words.
    Soulful Woman


  • EyeRaven
    January 25, 2007

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    As a Vilianelle

    You did quite a job, the form, the structure, the refrains, the 1st-2nd, then 1st alternations of lines 1 and 3 in the first stanza, and eventually the last 5th stanza which has them two lines as a couplet.

    Impressive, I adore form poetry, but I have never truly tried a vilianelle. (will have to sometime).

    The Image and the idea is lovely, and heart-embracing, I love the wolves.

    The one thing that you did lack, is the metre..
    vilianelles has to metre by tetra or pentameters of Iambic or whatever stress beat.

    For example: (my own interpetation):
    Soon with the moon, they dissapear,
    but they will not give up the fight,
    they have no signs to show of fear.

    T-dum ta-dum ta-dum ta-dum.
    4 ta-dums makes it an Iambic tetrametre, with the stress on the second syllable.
    I hope I have made a good impresson of an advice, I am not intending to be harsh nor mean.

    And for a first attempt, believe me you had most of it understood and structured.

    Be well, (you inspired me to do one myself).
    RD.


  • Walking shadow
    January 25, 2007

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    Great poem!

    Great job! I do admire this piece very much. You done a great job. We can only pray that the wolf will make it. Humans seem to never learn from the past. How very sad indeed. Good luck in the contest!


  • Grandia
    January 25, 2007

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    Wow! the way u use two sentences alternately as the end of every stanzas. the use of 3 sentences in every stanza is not frequently used.nice thinking! keep it up man! great! ;D


  • boy-poet
    January 24, 2007
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    great job im impressde


  • Molassis
    January 24, 2007

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    An awesome first attempt of Villanelle!!! I've never tried to write one but from what I've read of them... you did a great job!

    I think the way we clear cut forest and leave all the animals with NOTHING is such a crying shame... it makes me sad to see...

    Best wishes to you in the contest!!!

    ~Melissa

  • deleteit
    January 24, 2007

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    I love the way you have written this. It is a sad sight that man would rather have them extinct than to enjoy the beauty that they bring. Good luck in the contest


  • americanrebel
    January 24, 2007
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    wow.

    I love this write it is so beautiful and free very much like the wolves that you're writting about very well done.- Rebel


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    January 24, 2007
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    BEAUTIFUL AND SO WELL WRITEN YOU ARE VERY CLOSE SO VERY CLOSE::THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING


  • Spiritvision angel
    January 24, 2007
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    I love this, the meaning and the picture!!! I hold wolves as a favorite of mine and you have served them well here.

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