this is my heartfelt note to my suicide
i love a girl who cannot and will not love me back
i feel as if my heart is torn out
and the only thing left of emotion is slack
i pick up what i can of myself as it is scattered
i dropped my only reality on the mirror of fate
she picks up one piece and misses my reflection
i think her only emotion at the time is hate
im sorry that i had to tell you the way i did
im sorry that in the end you have no feelings to reflect upon me
my heart was torn out causing my reality to be a mirror
and the only reflection is the darkness within that i see
so i am asking you to put the heart back inside my chest
rip the rest of my soul into pieces and throw me unto the obis
i know that the feelings that i confuse you with are annoying
and i know that i am just one less person whom to miss
ask me what i think of my life with such an empty grave
no casket could contain the feelings that i have given into
please just read this one last heartfelt suicide
pick up the pieces of my broken heart and feel my only emotion and color,
BLUE
Author notes
she knows who she is.. and i know who i am without
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As honest and meaningful (to you) as this is, I'm not really looking for rambled journal entries. If this is your personal best, go practise some more. Thanks anyway.
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Losing someone who feels like they're all of you, is painful. I think losing them to life, even more so than death. This is a sad piece. Very emotional and powerful. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for taking the time to enter and best of luck.
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i'm being honest....
i absolutely love the last stanza... very good. I liked it a lot!
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Wow, strong...I really like how you said your feelings can't be put into a casket- like you can't keep my heart in a box kind of. Great write yet again...however...how depressing...
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it's a great poem, makes you think what you're living for and who loves you
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This is very good.. but very sad. I hope things work out for you!
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