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A Fool's Wish - (Pantoum)

 

To wish the long life

Is the wish of a fool

For it may be full of strife

And such it can be cruel.

 

Is the wish of a fool

The same wish of the wise

And such it can be cruel

Who knows where the answer lies.

 

The same wish of the wise

For it may be full of strife

Who knows where the answer lies

To wish the long life.

 

 

 

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Pantoum form. My thoughts on "Oh, Life long to the fool, short to the wise"

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 11

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    Oh this is wonderful piece of work. I love the way you go in circles with the word wish. It was a plasure to read.


  • Gods child40 silver member
    December 22, 2008
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    wow makes you think. great job!!


  • Trixie08
    February 9, 2007
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    I love it and a very beautiful piece.


  • Sacred Ground
    January 28, 2007
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    Good write. Your outlook and depth of this piece makes ir a very enjoyable read.


  • Kari gold member
    January 27, 2007

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    Yikes..you did very good on this form and nailed things with the truth and raw emotions.. I loved it.
    Kari


  • zochit2me gold member
    January 25, 2007
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    Fantastic

    Great read and fantasic message in this short yet powerful poem. Good luck in this contest.
    Becky


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    January 24, 2007

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    This is a very wise poem AND really makes one think long life are short life,seems the really good die young.EXCELLENT...


  • Cannonsfire
    January 24, 2007

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    This is a bit like the conundrum, only the good die young! For a life lived long can be alone and sad if the person is arrogant and prideful but then the wise who suffer for others such as Mother Theresa did, they can see and feel the cruelty of it all and find not enough time do they have to right all the wrongs. I think this is a piece that may have no answer, in that it will make people think as they read.


    • W B Burkholder
      January 24, 2007
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      Spot on cannons yours is the closest explanantion to what i have been looking for
      your comments were on the mark

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    January 24, 2007

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    my this one is right up my alley, I truely enjoyed this read and is something like I would write myself. very good job dear. I hope you do well in the contest and I wish you much luck.
    Hugs,
    Suzi

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