The cold chills the skin
and freezes the bones
leaving your whole being
shaking and breathless
Hope is hard to come across
in such unkind times
in such unkind weather
and yet I always believe
there is room for rebirth
there is room for rejoyce
Then I hear of such frigid news
it feels like my heart
has been left out in this cold
I can feel the unborn tears
freezing into crystals
before they even fall
I can hear the loveless screams
reverbrating off of the trunk's walls
and falling on a deaf heart of a mother
I can see the hope gone
flying from her eyes
like a bullet of a gun
aimed at a little child
He didn't deserve this fate
I know this because I know him
He didn't deserve this death
I know this because I feel him inside
She didn't deserve such a gift
I know because she shattered him
like a plate she didn't need anymore
She tossed out a life,
and I can't help but feel
her life should be tossed out too
I would have taken the baby if you just knocked on my door
Author notes
recently they found a dead baby in the trunk of a car on my street, and I am so devesatated I cannot get myself to think. I feel so ripped up inside that I can't eat, sleep, or do anything. whyy didn't she just ask for help?Its even worse because I knew the girl, its so scary to think she could be on trial for murder
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, I am bookmarking this... At first I thought you were expressing your feelings on abortion but then I read your note and my eyes just got watery... How terrible! The NERVE of some people. You have written a beautifully sad poem for a truly tragic event.
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every one thinks that stuff like that only happens to someone else. but we're all "someone else" to someone else.
that a mother or a person would kill a poor helpless child like that makes me sick. this poem makes it fell like it could have been my city, my street. thats... wow -
"can hear the loveless screams
reverbrating off of the trunk's walls
and falling on a deaf heart of a mother"
Wow.. So sad and touching.. Things like this are just one of many things that we shut out of our minds.. This poem is a good reminder.. Very well written.. It brought tears to my eyes..
Hugs for you and a pat on the shoulder for such a moving piece of work..
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Wow a very heartfelt emotional write. Such a devastating thing to go through. Imagery was great. Well done. Keep them coming and blessed be.
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Haunting
A beautifully penned poem on a topic that is heart wrenching. Unfortunately not everyone sees a child as a gift. But let us not judge as we don't know what could have drawn anyone to such a drastic step, to kill her own child defies our natural maternal instincts.
Pray for her and let us learn from this, we need to tell young mothers there is always hope and another option
Great write
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Thanks alot. Knowing the girl, I don't judge her, I just judged what actions she took Thank you for your adive I'll hope for her with all my heart that maybe next time they will just ask for help, and someone may just help them
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a good poem, sadly the world is full of horrors as well as good things, there is always hope in the ehart though and smiles can be found even in dark days. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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OH MY GOD
How ironic, i just posted the blue toboggan, about my daughters baby due in march. I read this and my heart just dropped. What in the hell was she thinking? GOD has a new child to cuddle. That girl will forever be changed. Such a tragedy. You are brave to pen about such a touchy subject.
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thanks sooo much. yes it is a tragedy i just hope that this baby has found peace
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O wow
This is so full of emotion.. And very sad indeed.. I'm so sorry for this happenening.. Some people just don't think until it's way to late. I guess some people are to ashamed to ask for help... Even though help is the right thing to do... I wish the best for you and whoever else that has been struck with this horrible news... Everything will get better it just takes a little time... Wonderful poem... So amazing... I loved it and it brought me to tears... Great job and may luck be with you through anything you may encounter. -
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thanks so much for reading and commenting. i will take your adivice to heart
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Powerful stuff.
Really well written especially considering such a difficult subject,all the best to you
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thanks so much... btw cute picture of that doggie
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sweetie I'm so sorry you have to go through this. meh. I don't know what to say, I knew the mother as well, not as much as you -- just by name and sightings in the hallways. but.. meh. <3
I'm always here for you Wolf.
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thans panther, its tough and i know its even harder for the girls that truly knew mia. i hope with all my aching heart she didn't kill that baby, that it was just a miscarriage and a mistake...
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Well, done and thank you for sharing. I think you did an outstanding job on this poem. Another magnificent poem to your collection. This is a great poem. I love it all... the poem, the background, the topic....it's all great. there is a depth and undertone to this that goes and flows excellently. keep writing......you have a lot to offer. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways. You rock....
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thankss sooo much you rock too!
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thanks so much for your kind words and for reading
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Without the authors notes this was saddening, with the authors notes this was heart-wrenching! Such a terrible story! Even with this weighing on you, you have managed to write an incredibly beautiful piece of work. I'm very impressed!
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thanks so much for the comment it means alot to me. Im glad you liked it
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can I change that to three applaud?
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sure
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awesome
Brilliant work here. And reading your notes after---well that helped considerably. In fact, it's got me thinking to do the same with poems I write---explain a bit about what is behind them. It worked for me with this one. I got way more appreciation after reading your notes on it then I otherwise had because you brought the event into focus. In the poem , something is inferred...it's up to interpretation to give the exact flavor to your words....although the meaning is clear---your meaning comes through---a child has been wasted on a person themselves a waste....you feel the mother should die based on her own judgement ---her judgement , the one she placed on the life that was dependant on her. I can understand that. But I don't think you'll always feel that way. You have a right to be angry....you've been traumatized. Yeah it's very tragic a baby was tossed aside like trash, doubled with its being left for you to view it's being there, too.
Great poem, great way to vent sentiment too.
Hugs.
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thanks very mcuh, yes i know. In truth I don't really feel that she should die. She should be punished somehow though. Knowing this girl, seeing her personality, seeing what she once was to become a mother that kills her own child it makes me so upset that you can amke such a high dive from that thanks for your comment
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very interesting
words you have here. MY GOD .. your authors notes made me cry.. I loved this part of your poem.
Hope is hard to come across
in such unkind times
in such unkind weather
and yet I always believe
there is room for rebirth
there is room for rejoyce
Then I hear of such frigid news
it feels like my heart
has been left out in this cold
I can feel the unborn tears
freezing into crystals
before they even fall
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thanks soo much Kassie. yea its super sad
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