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Fractured Pair





Steadily succumbing to darkened shadows,
While I battle with my self-infliction.
My confidence is just below the threshold,
As I wonder if I will resist the addiction.

Loneliness consumes whatever's left of me,
As I look left to that desolete space.
Hours just pass by without my own knowledge,
And I am confined to this forbidden disgrace.

You couldn’t say I have scars,
Because my wounds never heal
She wouldn’t let them close,
And I bleed out amounts surreal.

Every thought of her brought to mind,
Bring yet another laceration.
Her smile stirs so many emotions,
That my soul strains from complication.

Dwelling in this infernal perdition,
He haunts me in this dolorous dream.
Day and night, I find no peace,
So I can escape his demential scheme.

Of course, I know, I won't succeed,
As I've reached this nadiral pit.
Burdened by all his pure deceptions,
Failure is what I can't admit.


Callous confusion sets to my mind,
Creating for my soul, a spiritual pyre.
I’ve waited so long for a release from you,
And now I’ll disappear in ashes of fire.

Collapsing together, we fall apart,

From love, we both have been impaired.
Entwining mutually in this rhyme,
Our souls' tribulation has now been shared
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Author notes

Erm, ok?
I made this with Nick
His verses are blue
Mines are gray-ish
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  • Age of Rain
    September 25, 2008
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    This is very beautiful even in its melancholy. A remarkable work!

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 10, 2008
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    Nice. This was nice.


  • Pureisolation
    January 22, 2008

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    very interesting write, I like it alot. theres alot of parts that i can relate to. Thanks for sharin


  • Ephiphany
    October 1, 2007

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    vivid and very decorative...

    LOVED it, wonderful Collaboration you two
    Job well done


  • sinner-
    September 22, 2007
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    the only poem i found worthy to comment upon, very enticing & vivid.


  • TaintedBeauty
    September 21, 2007

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    This is awesome!! I love the collaboration idea, and I love the contrast of your stanzas from his, though they both share the same idea. The background is beautiful and so is the poem in itself.
    "Loneliness consumes whatever's left of me,
    As I look left to that desolete space.
    Hours just pass by without my own knowledge,
    And I am confined to this forbidden disgrace."
    This part is tragically beautiful to me, because I know how this can be. Very beautiful write.


  • shysky
    April 17, 2007

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    I love the collaberation. I thought you guys write very well together and it was a very good read


    Thank you for entering my Contest
    I loved The Read
    ~A Heart's Hope Lies With Belladonna~


  • panegyric ink
    February 25, 2007

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    this really took off like a rocket for me!!!! Nice writing with this one, is about all I can say. But I can say more, overall, there is a mastery at play here with the use of so many great and original expressions your poem that you have shared here is PERFECTION!!!!!
    take it easy,
    -panegyric ink


  • love-strucken-2007
    January 27, 2007

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    wow

    i really like this. i like how it shows your emotion with the situation. sorry i didnt get back to you sooner i have been busy


  • hollywood.
    January 26, 2007

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    you guys did an awesome job on this!! i just love it!!!
    good luck in the contest!!!
    Your AP.... [LaLaLa]
    -Tink


  • Ntagatf
    January 25, 2007

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    you two did an amazing job!!! I loved this its amazing and this is how i feel as well... i wish you the best of luck in the contest!!!! great job!!! keep up the good work!!

    ~tearstaindangel~


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 25, 2007

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    When writing collaborations it seems the best of both comes forward, as is what happened in this poem. Very well written, easy to read and understand - love the peacock picture. We used to raise thm on our acreage about 10 years ago and I love seeing them.


    • Never Fall in Love
      January 26, 2007
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      You're lucky
      I've never seen peacocks before
      but they are just too beautiful
      thanks alot for the comment


  • Jadeheart 41
    January 25, 2007

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    Exceptional !!

    I think this is truly a testimony of pure love and faith put into a relationship..for if we don't take that leap and trust someone enough to give them our all than what do we have? Truly an emotional and well done piece, the picture is beautiful with the poem and background as well! Thankyou for sharing this!


  • Cannonsfire
    January 25, 2007

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    This really tugs at the heartstrings of two people trying to get through the hardest part of love and friendship, imploring, begging, questioning. It is truly well written and together it makes it a fine collaboration.


  • Sassyfairy
    January 25, 2007

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    I really love it! I didn't notice until I read your notes that it was a collaboration. What you both wrote flowed together beautifully. Again, great write!


  • Death of the Author
    January 25, 2007

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    Ooo awesome good luck in that contest. I agree with your opinion on love ^^ especially the last bit..you can't describe love I guess. Sorry if this is a bit of a vague comment, im not very good at in-depth, but I really liked it, well done to both of you Take care and keep it up!

    Little bro x


    • NickN
      January 25, 2007
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      Ah don't worry about it, in depths aren't important. Just knowing it was appreciated is enough.

      The last part of the opinion of love was Never Fall in Luv's though. I can describe love easily. Love is what I see everytime that I look in my soulmate's eyes and see her smile. Even when it's not for me, it's beautiful. Thank's for the comment.

      -Nick

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