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Moments Are on Fire

Moments are on fire
And the ashes fall softly
On the Time’s grey cheek,
Seconds slouch forward,
And I
Enshrouded by clouds of doubt
Drink every drop of sand
That falls to herald the passage of another
Hesitant bleeding ounce of time,
Gusts of passion shake every vein of mine,
Strawberry-tasting memories of being with you,
Flash through my chaotic mind,
Leading me on the velvet path,
Which leads to an emerald valley
Where squirrels of love
Are on every branch
Tasting the hazelnuts of being with you…
 

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  • Vernal Bloom
    August 15, 2007

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    I remember another excellent AP poet who uses a metaphoric language while composing poems. Unfortunately he left AP and I can not direct you to his page (I’m still hopeful he will be back someday.. maybe)
    I’m not the only one who enjoys metaphors. I know so many people who even host contests for that so I recommend you to enter contests. Not only you have a big chance of winning with your good poetry and others can enjoy them but also you can be critically judged and it’s really helpful.
    I talked too much on this comment. Good poem it was and thank you for sharing

    ~Vernal Bloom~


  • Delete this polease
    June 5, 2007

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    I see this more as a love poem. Not as a broken heart one. Its beatuiful none the less and I love the nature. Its so true. Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • Heather Kelley
    May 17, 2007

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    good

    I like this write alot the allteration was put together very well its sad yet so sweet good luck in the contest
    ~Heather


  • Gwenevere
    April 21, 2007
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    The sweetness of a memory to wipe away doubts and fears.This is a sad and yet lovely write, Ros


  • Heavens Child
    April 18, 2007

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    This is an amazing piece. The imagery and metaphors are awesome.... very original and unique. Great job on this and thank you for the entry in my contest.


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 16, 2007
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    Some sad memories in these lines - liked the alliteration in the poem, think the s on drops could be left off - drink every drop of sand.


  • PoetsAngel
    April 13, 2007

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    I'm not sure why, but this piece has bought tears to my eyes...could it be that my sub-conscious is reading between the lines. I sense sadness and loss...I could be way off track here, and please tell me if I am incorrect...

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