Help Me Quick
Help me now, help me quick
I think I have lost my mind
All this anger makes me sick
How can you be so unkind
I cannot love you more than this
Trust me, I promise I have tried
Tis for your touch that I missed
And your kisses for which I cried
I thought we could make it work this time
I thought that I had earned your trust
Loving you so much is still my crime
Until you snap, and bones are bust
I cannot do this anymore
Your hurtful words bruise my soul
Should I leave, walk through the door
Or fall at your feel like a battered rag doll
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another one from last night feeling down.
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Sadly touching
Good write.
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thanks for reading and commenting Nona, it was easy to write as i was increadibly depressed at the time
ang
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Deeply emotional
This is so deeply emotional and so sad. A heartfelt cry for help. This is short, sharp and to the point. It plays on the heartstrings - and it works for the simple reason is that each word is never wasted. I loved it.
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thank you for reading and commenting my Brother, i only saw your comment now i was rather down the night i wrote this
ang
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Aw Ang
Does this mean things are not working out between you and K?
I can't say that i am surprised. I almost expected it.
I have a theory about love...
It's really gross when a dog goes back and lickes up it own vomit.... why do we think love is any different.
The call it a break up cos some thing is broken
Love and light
I hope things are going well
xXx
Phed
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awhh, sweetie!
What happened with you and Lisa?! Everything okay?! Tell me!!! Great write, though.
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Wow Ang,
what can say, love hurts in many ways, and life is often a very confusing place. Your emotions as always are well conveyed in your work, good luck, i hope this time passes and you find peace
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Damn
Whoever you are with does not deserve your love. This poem was penned excellently. Very well written and sad as hell. If this true, please leave this person and find someone who will treat you right and return your love.
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Please don't ever even think as your self as a battered rag doll, you do not deserve to be battered physically or emotionally, don't let it happen.
It pains me that you feel this way, it makes my soul cry out with yours. (it sounds corney but honestly I feel your pain) Im blaming myself because if I had been more understanding maybe you wouldn't have had to go thru this. Im sorry my love
*BIG hugs*
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my dearest, dearest captain, it was not you that i was writing about, things just got really stressed last night (and no no-one or nothing was hit) it just feels as though my soul gets a battering sometimes
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Yes my love I know you didn't mean physically necessarily, but there are more ways to batter someone than physically. I realise it wasn't me you were writing about, but had I acted differently you may not have been going thru this now.
Im sorry I really am
Your Captain forever -
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it would have happened anyway, this is my fate, i have to be here doing this....
ang
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