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Surrender


Silence

echoes throughout the night
I cannot hear your voice
my arms reach out
for nothing to hold
Tearful

eyes weep
my heart aches
where have you gone?
How could you leave
without uttering a word?
Hush,
did you speak my name?
Could it be?My love has returned.
For it is not,
it's only in my thoughts
Saddness

consumes burdening my soul
as I wait here all alone
yearning for your love
Needing
for your body
pressed against mine
Take me..
want me

for all that I am
Come

relinquish this pain
surrender
to me

your undying love

 

 

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  • Endeavor gold member
    February 26, 2007
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  • DarkChildsKiss silver member
    February 19, 2007

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    Thanks for entering!

    Honestly, this write is so sad. Depressing sad. I like it! It is good poem! Thank you for entering and your entry is appreciated!


  • DarkChildsKiss silver member
    February 14, 2007
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    Thank you for entering my contest. I'll give my true comment to this poem later.

  • Endeavor gold member
    January 25, 2007
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    Excellent

    You write very well when you are in anguish

    I think you should remaine that way

    for the sake of your art

    Compelling words

    Take me..want me
    for all that I am
    Come
    relinquish this pain
    surrender to me
    your undying love

    Love it

    Rick

  • dillpickle62
    January 24, 2007

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    Yes, so sad

    Sooo, sad. Poetry is a good bandaid at times. Nice way to write any pain away or to write a new heart felt throb. Which there always is, plenty out there.


  • Shakes-spear
    January 24, 2007
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    Ok

    This is hot! I think I need a cold shower. Want to move to arkansas/ There brothers and sisters can do this....oh yea...mom said no. This is very nice, but the feelings behind it are sad. No one should have to be alone, but life doesn't always go like we want. Good job Sis, Bubba


    • mypassion
      January 24, 2007
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      ohhhh bad boy..

      get your head out of the gutter..(LOL) just wait til you read my next poem...
      You will need to add some ice cubes with that cold shower..(lol)

      I agree no should be alone, but I always believe no should look for love, for love will find you...

      Thanks bubba,

      *LOVE*

      sis

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