Lucidness
She’s like heroine, my drug, my fix
She’s my sanity my grounding vice
She’s in my blood burning through my veins
She cools me down like a quick spring rain
She’s the one I crave every waking moment
She resounds ‘I Love You’ in my dreams
She’s my drug I cannot live without
She’s my lucidness that I gave up
My life is a jumble of mixed up emotions
Slit my wrists and watch me bleed
Crimson stains on virgin snow
Purge myself of my worthlessness
My candle light diminishes
Blown out by your cruel words
Author notes
something i wrote last night feeling rather down in the dumps. it may not be my best work, but at least im writing again 
(surely that counts for somethint 
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In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful and yet so sad
Again. Ang, your writing is deep. It shows your deep thinking about your situation with two women in your life. Your feelings about the two are really from the heart, the very soul of your being. Keep writing my sis.
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thank you my dearest Brother, my life does indeed weave a tangled mess for me, and i dont see it getting any easier!!!!.
thanks for reading and commenting
ang
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Obsession
ain't it fun?
I think all women are whores and it is better to be alone. But i found a woman who i felt like this for and i got burned.
Well Ang as always you never cease to move me with your poetry -
Hmmm
This is well written and flows beautifully. I like the stucture and rythym. The entire poem is good.
But why did you give her up? Is the one you gave up the same one who's cruel words caused you to feel this way? -
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thank you for reading and commenting Jeb, it is greatly appreciated.
in answer to your question, its 2 different women who do this to me. the woman i live with does cause me a lot of emotional heartache, while the other one continually loves me...
my life ends up having a more interesting plot than any soapie on tv at the moment! LOL
once again, thanks for commenting
ang
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Agreed with the general sentiment around here - it's a far, far better thing to vent through the healing act of putting pen to paper than to leave it caught inside or letting it out destructively.
The choice of lucidness is an interesting one to me - at first blush, I'd thought it perhaps intentionally wrong, but I see from a quick check that it is real... learn something new every day.
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thank you for reading and commenting it is greatly appreciated.
ang
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The main thing is you ARE writing again, this is far more productive in releasing your pent up emotions than any knife will ever be.
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that is very true, i wont go that far although i have felt like it at times
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thanks for stopping by and reading my work
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Should it get too much Im at the end of the phone or just round the corner
I still love you but thats a given
forever your captain
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i hope it wasn't my words that were cruel! Please don't slit your wrists, I couldn't bare it. Let me try to relight your candle for you, sad for me that Im only in your dreams
Never the less it says alot in a few lines.
Don't ever give up my love
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no my sweet captain, it was not your words, its just life happening around me.
still love you my sweet bokkie
ang
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This makes me SAD
Ang my love, Im sorry that this is how you feel, I wish I could make it better, but it seems I only make it worse. Im not sure why the She's are in and out of bold, is it 2 different people you are speaking about.
Check the spelling of heroin, Im not sure you have spelt it right coz it looks like heroine as in female hero
*hugs and more hugs*
me
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Yes it is 2 people im talking about Lisa. i just didnt name them.
ang
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