You are changing
There is a cool distance
between us,
as if you are not here
I don't have all
of you,
just pieces that you
choose to share with me
Our kisses are short
no longer lingering and
full of passion
We barely touch
Our lovemaking becoming abrupt,
dutiful techniques
We laughed at couples
like this
knowing it would never happen
to us
And yet, here we are
I miss you
I miss us
Our love is fading
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A contest entry
- Picture Inspired by countrybabe.
525 points, ended February 4, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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SAD
You are so good with those words from your heart.you sound just like you were talking to him from a broken heart and a deep longing...
excellent...
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My, my, my.....
Like a rose withering in the merciless wind, so was this poem. Wonderful work!
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BRAVO....
Your interpretation of this picture is incredible...your words flow like honey from the comb...dripping the fear and sorrow of a failed relationship. Again....BRAVO -
as real and honestly authentic as a love poem can be, the fragrence of a rose dies in the withering. a fresh poem and altho as painful as it is to see, a brilliant write. blessings and best wishes, ~r.
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Excellent
Two aces in a row
I will add you to my favorites
Wonderfull tender tradgic words
Love this
I miss you
I miss us
Our love is fading
Rick
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A BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!!
This was such a beautiful poem, yet very sad and heartfelt. Love is a powerful emotion that takes us on many journeys. Happy and sad. Thank you for sharing. Wonderful poem!!!!!!!!
Takre care, Sandy
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Not Bad
This piece is not bad at all. I liked the way you turned the meaning of the picture around to something negative. Well done on writing such a great piece. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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