In my dreams there is a world,
Where nothing is as it seems.
Snow is black,
Sun is cold,
And nothing is everything in between.
When I feel sad I go away,
To that secret somewhere,
In which I can play.
In that secret doorway I can see all my dreams,
But they will never see me.
Author notes
How is it? Did I cut it off too soon? This is(do I even NEED to tell you?) for a contest. I actually like it better than some of my other poems...
A contest entry
- ~~Picture Contest~~ by Sokarjo.
500 points, ended January 31, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Did I cut it off too soon?
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It's like a dream, with pain and tears, our imagination too, our hopes and beauty...
It's amazing and like a fairy tale
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I like it a lot. I don't write poems like that so I'm drawn to them. I don't know if this is offensive or not, but it sounds like your talking about The Chronicles of Narnia... That's what it made me think of.
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Don't worry I'm not insulted, I'm happy you liked my poem! ^^
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I like it a lot. I don'r write poems like that so I'm drawn to them. I don't know if this is offensive or not, but it sounds like your talking about The Chronicles of Narnia... That's what it made me think of.
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this is really good- good luck in the contest i hope you do well!
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It's really very good.
I don't know if it was intentional, but I like the spacing in the line "And nothing is everything in between." You have an interesting pattern and style; I like it. I don't think it's too short; if you feel you've said what you wanted to say, no poem is too short.
Thanks so much for entering my contest; good luck!
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The reason the spacing is there is because I tried to italicize the word, but it didn't work. It just put in extra spaces... ^^
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CrystalJet
Haha, well, it kinda works... I kinda like it.
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