I wonder whether I am dreaming
Or in a dream
I eat you at night
I eat in light
My eyes are close
I place you upon my lips
Dark
Sweet
Delicious
Juicy
Tasty
I still feel the last drop inside me
My soul dances in ecstasy
A contest entry
- Anything and Everything by Welcome-To-Hell.
700 points, ended February 16, 2007, 54 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Such a lovely write... Like the kind of innuendo that flows throughout this. Lipstick and uhm something else
Great write anyway love the picture and your wonderful words as well.
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and they say the sweetest things come in small packages, you just proved it here, a short verse but full of the sweetness your heart desires and dreams of, well done.
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omg thats just hot as all hell and way powerful for a short write this is wonderfully penned best of luck in the contest
Bravo -
I enjoyed this, short and sweet. Awsome. Well done.
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WHEW!
In a few lines, you say a lot. I really like this line, "still fill the last drop inside me." I think the word is "feel" not "fill" am I right? Nontheless, this poem was very delicious and (taste full) lol. It makes me want to dance with you. mmmmumm good! -
Wow momma.......this is something.
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Oh I love how this one just seemed to tease the reader with a heavenly delight. It was so fun and yet so hot to read. You really did an amazing job writting this piece.
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My mind is wandering, so it is very hard to finish this sentence that I know should end soon lips and closed eyes and I know there is supposed to be a period and she can still feel the last drop and my grammar is totally falling apart but I can so imagine her soul dancing in ecstasy... OK. I can't shake this image, so it must be worth three bunnies.
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