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Reaper

Skin as white as snow,

or as corroding bones.

Eyes that fiercly glow,

morbid undertones.

Lips as red as blood,

teeth yellowing with decay.

Cloak dragged across the mud,

he's coming here to play.

This may be your last night,

might be the last time you smile.

For he will give you fright,

and consequences far too vile.

Decapitated body parts,

his symbolic representation.

For death is his true art,

to send humans to damnation.

This reapers ready to rip,

to tear your life away.

You can't give him the slip,

when he is set to play.

Author notes

Reaper... I hope it sounds alright... Can change the name if anyone else takes it up, but I just chose a name simple, but shortened, you know? Hope this sounds alright. Thanks for checking it out and thank you very much for letting me be in the contest. -

Option 1 - Halloween (well it's creepy, isn't it?)

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  • BleedingBlackTears
    April 14
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    nice work. i see you have accumulated a mountainous amount of trophies. and now i see why.


  • Flowergirl
    April 13
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    very nice work i love it great work....

  • Eusebius
    April 2

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    oh, this is very good! you have a wonderful sense of what rhymes will work (the meter is a bit off, but easily fixable) I like this poem a whole bunch!!!


  • Lady Michaella
    February 11
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    wow.. a wonderfully dark poem. well penned!

    -Lemon Bee-
    xx


  • Star Shine
    August 22, 2008

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    The concept of the Grim Reaper ha salways been scary to me, even after seeing him on Family Guy with the voice of Norm what's his name. very novel and creative. Thanks for the entry.


  • A Citys Ember
    July 10, 2008
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    wow, i loved it, a lot, so dark, it literally gave the chills. friggin amazing

  • Deadmans Heart
    May 15, 2008

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    great dark write

    the only thing was it seemed to describe a psycho killer(Jack the Ripper comes to mind) more than the grim reaper in my eyes(only my opinion).


  • XLadyElinorX
    May 10, 2008

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    ooooh! (shivers)

    Great write! Very descriptive and good use of imagery. Gives me the creeps! Which I like in this case. Dark can be good sometimes. . .


  • sailor ptolema
    May 10, 2008

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    creepy (in a good way, of course)

    thats why I LOVED it!
    such great imagery! I can picture the Reaper clearly in my mind. Gave me some chills!!


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    March 11, 2008
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    Ahh!!! You are so talented... I'm jealous. lol


  • jamiedoring
    November 26, 2007

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    Skin as white as snow
    or as corroding bones.

    That was a great way to start this wonderful write! I love how you take the cliche "skin as white as snow" and flip it so perfectly. Excellent rhyme and flow. :-)


  • xCandieKissesx
    October 27, 2007
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    Pretty creepy. I'm convinced. This was a job well done! You scared me a bit. I like the rhyme scheme. The first stanza struck my attention, after that; it wasn't as strong as I hoped it would be. But I still like it. Great job! Good luck in the contest! Kudos.
    Jackie


  • TwiztidMaggot
    June 24, 2007

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    yeah, I like this... this is the kind fo poem I'm REALLY looking for! good job! I really really like it! you got some talent here! keep it up!!!!!!

    Crimson


  • Timeless Wisdom silver member
    June 15, 2007
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    Dark and Mysterious...awesome write and thanks for your entry


  • thelovesongwriter
    May 31, 2007
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    wow the description is great! good job and good luck.


  • Megan Awesome
    May 19, 2007

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    Damn. Thats all I gotta say. Lol. I loved it. I loved the flow and the way you decribed the reapers killing as him playing. This sent chills up my spine. Thank you for the entry, and good luck!
    Megan


  • Lj-
    January 27, 2007

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    I liked this!!

    Your rhyming was great.

    In the fourth line of the third stanza, line twelve, you forgot the second 'o' in 'too.'


    Great poem.
    Good luck.
    Thank you for your entry.


  • ZorroTheFox silver member
    January 24, 2007

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    this was a good write. I always enjoy a hint of death in my nighttime readings. keep up the great work.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    January 23, 2007

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    wow, this is the grim reaper, kind of makes the reaper, i don't know, a little female like, but if you think about Death comes in many forms, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Hell In Harmony
    January 23, 2007
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    =] twisted<333
    Kat


  • annoyedfairy
    January 23, 2007
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    Brilliant!

    Man, that is good. I really like the lines 1 thru 4. They just fit together really well. I think that you have a fantastic future as a poet. I really enjoyed this poem. I can't wait to read some more of your work. Excellent job

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