Indescribable euphoria subsides
as your mind begins to race,
welcome submission and give way
to insanity.
Who is to Blame?
Reluctantly conformed asphyxiated and
restrained, interrogated by silence
and petrified by protuberant eyes.
Who is to Blame?
Flashes of iridescence clouds your
minds eye, the consequences of
influence inevitably clear, your
skin begins to crawl from within.
Who is to Blame?
As the pressure from within implodes
serenity prevails, overtaken by peace
for life is now over.
Who is to Blame?
An illicit crystalized substance
so easy to attain, an amphetamine
abused but never desired.
Who is to Blame?
A syringe brimming with death? An
injection of toxins into ones
own person? A mind easily conformed
by influence?
Who is to Blame?
A contest entry
- I NEED A NEW AP NAME by Aeonna.
300 points, ended January 25, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is well done, Dear Poet.
..As the pressure from within implodes
serenity prevails..
Brilliant.
Serenity surely can prevail, LadyJai.
Miss ya lots!
~May the ink in your pen flow freely~
Repetitious Chaos
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wow
I can't say I know much about drugs, i've always steered clear of everything but cigarettes. But I think you wording is amazing. You have quite the vocabulary. It's nice to see someone who can use words that aren't quite so typical.
I like the repetition of the line "Who is to blame?" I think there is also more than one issue here. Why are the drugs so easy to get and why are people using/abusing them? Again, I can't say I know much about drug abuse, but this makes me curious. Great write!
Oh, and thanx for commenting on my story "The Eternal Bruise."
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Thoughtful
This is an interesting poem because the whole time I was reading I wondered: Is the speaker asking who is to blame for the epidemic, or is the speaker saying the amphetamine is to blame for the epidemic? I love the vocabulary in the first three stanzas. -
I cannot no way no how tell you are new to poetry here!
lol it just rocks, and the words go along so well, even though i don't understand a few 
but it's all good, i got it 
i loved the repeating line 
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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Very powerful and awesome message here. It is a sad thing here in this world with drugs. Hopefully and prayerfully we will overcome. Great job here. Smiles, Terry
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