Shiver in the comforting, fondest air.
Like flowing sails, the wind is whipping up your hair.
Ships with arcane masts, crash upon the shore.
Billowing sands blow white like snow.
Angels move like they're surfing on the clouds,
With marigold eyes, they sing blessings from their mouths.
Dream, dear friend of these thoughts for awhile,
then you'll be free, to sail on Ivory Isles.
From the coast of the Sun, to the Valley of the Stars,
the pages of the cosmos flip and move with a start.
A start of coral waters, that begin to wave,
upon the ice-capped rockies of the Palace of the Brave.
A contest entry
- Rainbows and Angels by Grey Mouser.
800 points, ended February 7, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"the palace of the brave"... that is very beautiful and reminded me of one of my favourite quotes: "Gentleness can only be expected from the brave". And this poem has such a lovely gentle, flowing, lifting feel about it... lovely poetry, Jay - what nice soft way to begin my day here.
~ Nicolette
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Very vivid imagery written here poet. This made me sigh. I love the opening stanza and every line in between. Love the "angels surfing on the clouds". This is a calming work of sunshine indeed! I wish you all the best in this challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Thank you for the escape, to to ride th waves to such a beautiful spot, as painted by your words. I could actually see the sand kicked up from the landing and the distant mountains! Very well done! VERY! Bravo!
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Fantastic Images
Beautifully imaginative write that brings such peaceful and comforting thought swith each passage. Such grand imagery and wonderfully presented. A simple joy to behold.
Thank you for entering this into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser
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This is wonderfully penned. The imagery is incredible. You have painted a beautiful comforting piece here. I found this to be comforting. Best of luck to you in the contest.
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There is a peace to this work, a taste of serenity. A very delicate flow while reading makes me simply sigh. Very beautiful. I wish you the best in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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wow! this is a beautiful poem - i love the lines:
From the coast of the Sun, to the Valley of the Stars,
the pages of the cosmos flip and move with a start.
A start of coral waters, that begin to wave,
upon the ice-capped rockies of the Palace of the Brave.
this truly is a great write. well done and good luck in the contest -
This poem flows so well and has a lovely singing quality about it...simply lovely and it leaves the reader with the most serene and peaceful feelings...like floating away to palaces on high. I so liked the image of angels "With marigold eyes" - very creative. A very good poem of rhyme that falls so gently on the ears.
~ Nicolette
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