Hard headed people
Who don’t like to cry
They just wander the world
Asking themselves why
Its tough to be alone
And have nobody who cares
Always getting stoned
Just because its there
People making faces
Judging left and right
Frustration is rising
And you just want to fight
Coldness feeling inside
Its hard to move around
Darkness creeping behind
Not making a sound
No one is to care for
Cause you don’t care at all
Nothing is to live for
Just watch as your life falls
Into endless darkness
From which you cant be free
Living in a hell hole
Right there next to me
Sounds of horror
Sense of death
Soon we’ll lose
Our very breaths
All will end
We’ll parish too
Its time to die
Our lives are through
Looking back
I see it now
How all my mistakes
Seemed so foul
I didn't care to notice
I didn't think to try
Now all I have is pity
Because I'm going to die
I look at you
You look at me
I hold you tight
And I just scream
This is the end
Its my demise
Now hold me close
And let us die
Author notes
#8)
This is just one of the dark poems by okadadokie. Enjoy. *grins evily*
A contest entry
- Your Darkest or Painful poem by Starnova.
400 points, ended January 30, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sadistic Emotions by Never Fall in Love.
650 points, ended April 11, 2007, 76 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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No one is to care for
Cause you don’t care at all
Nothing is to live for
Just watch as your life falls
I think thats the best part
for me atleast
well .. its a pretty good write
you spelt perish wrong
good luck in the contest
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this is really good, did you write it or someone else?
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This is very wicked but it's good...sorta chilling. The best of luck to you in the contest!
Kari -
*evil grin scares me... makes me want to piddle*
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Wow.
that was incredible. it really was. very honest and raw. thankYou for sharing. xxx-xxx-xxx
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Very dark for me. A well written poem thow the flow and transition were great. There was also a lot of truth to it. Good job!
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AWESOME!!!
That is a frikkin awesome poem. You have a real talent with words. Your poem flowed absolutely beuatifully. The only thing that I could see wrong with it was that you misspelled "perish"...You spelled it parish. Besides that I think that this is the very best poem I've read today by far. Keep writing and I look forward to readin g many many more of your poems in the future. Have a great day!!!
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AWESOME!!!
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