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Rose Colored Bandages

Here I come in rose colored bandages
right back to you

You covered my pain with rose after
leaving me black and blue

But I always return with all my love
and forgiveness


Thinking proof of true love is the
rose after the ugliness

Time and time again, cry, bleed

and run


Over and over again, forgive, forget
and hold on

Because you covered me in rose colored
bandages,

 

I lost my life to you

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  • SensualWhispers
    March 15, 2007

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    Cool

    Very very good. I really liked this poem .You've done a fantastic job. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie


  • catz Moderators member
    February 3, 2007

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    What a poignantly touching poem this is. You've taken a painful situation and turned it into something not less painful, but very realistic and beautifully written. So many people go through this kind of thing... I hope this isn't from your own personal experience, but whatever it is you've done an excellent job with the write.

    Good luck in the contest

    Dee


  • lilrochick silver member
    February 2, 2007

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    Loved it. "Thinking proof of true love is the
    rose after the ugliness" this was my favorite line. great job.

  • gothprincess7
    January 26, 2007

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    Nice!!!

    I loved this. It flowed so freely. I love the style you used. You made such a beautiful write. Thanks so much for sharing.


  • Bruised.Roses
    January 23, 2007
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    wow this was so good...I really liked the style you chose....and the structure made it a great flowing piece......you did a great job here and i hope to read more from you...good luck in the contest and keep writting


  • debilynn gold member
    January 23, 2007

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    this is a very deep emotional write. the rhythm is good. the imagery is great. sometimes people never learn. you have written such depth it takes the reader in. wonderful job with this. even though such violence it is a good read. keep on writing. i am looking forward to what your pen will do next. God bless you


  • PerVirtuous
    January 23, 2007
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    You are sticking me with needles of brilliantly written horror. You have proven that free will can indeed be subjugated, and the mind can refuse to learn. We will be dead for such a long time, it seems a shame to let it happen one second sooner than necessary.


  • BloodyBlades16
    January 23, 2007
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    Its very very pretty!


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    January 23, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem, I know exactly how you feel, I hope you write more and maybe if you have time read some of my work?


  • paperflowers
    January 23, 2007
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    strongly penned

    great flow; imagery is strong along with the emotion;

    the title is very catchy and does not lead to a piece that disappoints! the contrast between beauty and ugliness is so candid and real. you used all these things to pen a piece with terrible truth and power.

    good luck in your contest.

    ~pf


  • Random Thoughts
    January 23, 2007

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    very sad and ugly situation but well done it definately stirred some emotion in me, time and time again cry bleed and run I like how you have done that thanks for sharing good luck with the comp


  • Dancing Feather gold member
    January 23, 2007
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    I like this poem. We all have been through a similar thing as you have. keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest

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