I walk into the room
You don't have to scream, I can hear you
Bad trip, the needle sticks, you get your fix
From confrontation
I try to make it past
I don't want to get into it right now
Can't this family have one day to get away
From all the pain
And through the night I see the light
Shining from the neighbor's window
I dream of life where I'm safe
In a home where I am not alone
Someday I will lay me down on the grass
Where everything is greener
It always seems so good on the other side
I'm sick of all the heat, you can taste the hate in
The air, running through this family, uncomfortably
It's killing me
Is anybody there? In your eyes there's
Nothing to see, just because your dreams
Have died, don't drag me down, I've still
Got mine
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Super write
I sweetly you did a great job on this right. You had so many wonderful lines here. Its been a while since I read some of your writes. But today I will makeup for it. I really loved your dream like write it has alot of messages. (Lisa)
"I'm sick of all the heat, you can taste the hate in
The air, running through this family, uncomfortably
It's killing me
Is anybody there? In your eyes there's
Nothing to see, just because your dreams
Have died, don't drag me down, I've still
Got mine"
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great writing!!
loved the ending you have brought so well into this one!!!!
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This is a wonderful random thought. Freewrites can be fun ways to express our emotions. I am off to find more poems.
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Incredible
Really is totally amazing write. Keeps digging at the mind, filling in all the crevices.
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Wow.
Oh wow. This is an amazing, and a very deep and moving poem! I like the words and descriptions you use to express what you feel or want others to feel. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful write, and keep up the wonderful work!
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The story in this poem was well told and descriptive.
The emotion through it was sad but you show a hints of strength within the stanzas as well.
I know you are a strong person and you'll definitley pull through, have faith.
You always sho great compassion in your writings and you definitley can tell you love to write.
You have an awesome gift embrace it I look forward to reading more of your future writes.
Take care.
Love and Light.
~Raven Tears aka Deaths Maiden~
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oh wow lankin.... i hope evrything gets ok soon. sweets the grass only seems greener on the other side... its also filled with its own problems
dnt worry. one day u'lll wake up... and everything will b ok.u'll b truly happy.u deserve the best.i promise. ... it mite b tomorrow or nxt month or nxt year...or tek a couple of years.but you will. tek care.nice write
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Random thoughts of life and family as you know and see it. Very well written, nice flow and deep meaning. The grass always seems greener, until you get there. Secrets behind close doors are in every family, so more then others but still there. May you soon find your peace and understanding. This is really a nice write.
Lovely work, best to you!
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