Can you take this life?
Can you make it right?
Do you have the words to say to make it
All go away
You act so wise and so refined
Keep your bullshit lies 'cause I'm
Never gonna go your way
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I know very short but just came to my mind
Please tell me what you think
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Awesome
Awesome. This really grabbed me. No nonsense..just straight up emotion. I loved it.
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nice its short sweet and too the point I really like the feeling you put across. I'm me and I ain't gonna change for no one no whatt what you say. awesome job with love and giggles, the white rabbit
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straight up
Outstanding u go girl. (Lisa)
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well.. i jus wan to se your short poems..well this one is crude and raw..kinda powerfull poem..it was nice to read
regards
abuyi -
Great job
You said so much in such short words. Great job. Really is great.
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Short but really powerful. Too many details in a poem on this topic may result in the reader getting lost, but this was perfect. Excellent!
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Wow, powerful write.
Oh wow. This is a short poem, but it is very well written. It has a nice flow to it, and has a powerful meaning to it. Once again, wonderful write, and keep up the nice work!!!!!! -
This is short and powerful-a great quality for a poem. I liked it a lot. Keep going! Maybe check out a ferw of my writes? x
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This is a well written poem,
Comes across strong.
But only you yourself can make things right and becme truly happy..
Well done with this piece..
=)
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hmm its short but strong. words hardly ever mek pain go away. only u can mek urself truly happy. well atleast in my life thats wat i found out. no one has been able to fill that gap.
best to u sweets. tek care. keep pouring those feelings out. it'll mek u feel better 
* hands daisy chocos and gives her another tite hug and disappears.*
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There is often power in brevity. It is to the point and strong.
Nicely said!
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