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I Shed a Tear

My hands shaking
As we took our first kiss
My voice trembling
As I told you I loved you
My heart pounding
As you said ‘I love you too’
My life worth living
As I stood there next to you
My heart sinking
As you slowly walked away
My heart broken
As you walked out on me
My life over…

I shed a tear into the ocean,
The day you find it,
Is the day I stop missing you.

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    February 27, 2007

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    this is love in a pure form, i mean as i read this i saw the sorrow and the love mixed in a perfect balance, you did a great job, keep it flowing

  • capricornpoet silver member
    February 26, 2007

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    a tear in the ocean

    Innocence,love and sadness,Image of youth and a first kiss, knowing bliss then sadness,,,and a sweet ending as a tear in the ocean,,a gentle tragedy.
    lovely,


  • Rented Emotion
    January 23, 2007

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    Emotion is lovely

    Sadness... It makes me think of past loves and oceans of removed feelings. If someone really loves, they wouldn't walk away, which is why I've lived my life in caution of those words. Never get too close. Never be too sure when you are sure that this time its real, because it always turns around to bite you in ass. I feel this emotion. Good write. Keep it up.