Just forget I ever said
"it"
back
&we can go on
living
[ although it's a tad bit of a stretch to call it that ]
how we used to
see, my
bloodstream/nervous.system/acid.soaked.heart
can't take
any
sudden changes
...baby...
I thought you were a man
but you were just a,
just a...
why can't you just treat me like a toy?
&&I realize that
you're trying
to be my
best friend
[ but ]
toilet bowls&tile floors
claimed that title
months ago
I'm no queen~
try "painkiller princess"
[ syringe crown&hooker boots sold seperately ]
&&I'm longing for the days
when I
didn't
give
a
s h i t
about anything
[ but longing doesn't do a damn thing
but prolong the make believe ]
so just
stretch stretch stretch
yourself out
& heave your smoke fumed sigh
as I tell you
of the times
I was too.damn.sick to forge a lie
visions of glossy boned glamour
& pools of nicotene collecting
in hollowed out collar bones
crash crash crash
into reality
[ reeking of
open caskets&glitter eye lids
batting pseudo-romance
at broken down speed freaks
all.wrong for me ]
shh...
don't say a word,
for they give birth
to
n o t h i n g
but contempt
I don't care how you see me
as long as you dont
get the
[ wrong ]
impression
see,
the truth is:
I'm a fake
[ in every sense of the word ]
this face isn't mine~
I glued it on from
magazine cut outs
of razor striken
china dolls
bleeding ransom notes
wanna know a secret?
last night
I dreamt of
cyanide&empty bottles
dancing their way into oblivion
&&I was just
flow flow floating
around in their wake,
chasing rays of neon
dirt
over shattered
little
tablets
spewing their guts into
lithium laced vodka
closing in on one page now
&I still don't know
what I'm trying to say
[so]
keep those hands around my throat
babe
tug my hair til the plastic gives way
don't worry
darling~~
we'll be
famous
someday
Author notes
I aplogize for the length...it just kinda came spewing out.
In a list
A contest entry
- Glitter Queens & Nicoteen by E t e r n i t y.
650 points, ended March 5, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want your best dirrtypretty writes.! by MelissahhMidnite.
375 points, ended March 28, 2007, 9 entries
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tear me apart, love
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wow
thats great.
i love the flow of this
i love all of it
wonderful work
cookies&&[love]
~{ I N T I M A T E } -
"you're trying
to be my
best friend
[ but ]
toilet bowls&tile floors
claimed that title
months ago"
--oh that's harsh.
"so just
stretch stretch stretch
yourself out
& heave your smoke fumed sigh
as I tell you
of the times
I was too.damn.sick to forge a lie"
--that last line is a slap in the face. This is brutally honest and I love that.
"flow flow floating"
--hah! I've used this before - good minds think alike good minds think alike!!
The ending is awesome as well. Maybe sarcastic or possibly hopeful ... not sure what to think but I like it anyway.
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Ha...I was running out of paper and had to come up with an ending. I scrawled this all out in English class but ended up feeling fairly guilty for being so bitter when he walked me to my next class =\
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"But longing doesn't do a damn thing
but prolong the make believe"
I absolutely adore everything about this poem! Your use of imagery was so wonderful. You definitely know how to paint a picture with words. I loved the flow of it too! Amazing job! Good luck in the contest.
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GOD.
Darling If I could write like this I would be [famous]
Love it.
So many parts,
This is just
dirrty pretty being shoved down your throat and
bein laughed at behind your back.
.loveyou.
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this was absolutely amazing.
like you.
♥
loved every second of it.
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"why can't you just treat me like a toy?
&&I realize that
you're trying
to be my
best friend
[ but ]
toilet bowls&tile floors
claimed that title
months ago"
"I'm no queen~
try "painkiller princess"
[ syringe crown&hooker boots sold seperately ]"
"this face isn't mine~
I glued it on from
magazine cut outs
of razor striken
china dolls
bleeding ransom notes"
LoveItSoSoMuch.
Sweets, you're amazing. And I really hope you win that contest.
Noise&&Kisses
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