As the cold wind blows
Away from the east
And the full moon shows
Light silver in streams
The black clouds roll
As they cover the skies
No flesh and no soul
Someone is to die
A stranger walks into town
Darkness covers It's face
It seems quite familiar
But all minds will run blank
It travels quite swift
The cold winds on It's back
The cloud proceed footsteps
Turning the world to black
From the head to the foot
All draped in deep black
And found in It's left hand
A large book It does grasp
As It walks It does read
Using It's finger to guide
But what It is reading
Is merely just time
As It walks by households
The shutters do shake
As cold winds blow through
Looking for heartbeats to take
Watch The ill and the suffering
Stop fighting and silently die
No more struggles with pain
Now they find peace in the sky
The young as well as old
They all close their eyes
It has no knowledge of youth
It just knows the times
As It exits the town
Leaving morning and despair
As bodies now lie still
In the cold morning air
Those alive have question
For the stranger that passed
And they plead with the Lord
But their pain will not last
It may be days or years
Before the stranger comes back
With It's book in It's hands
And the dark shadows It casts
And It takes away with the dark
And leaves pain in morning light
Because Forever be Death
As long as there's Life
A contest entry
- 1000 points: The Grim Reaper by Lj-.
1000 points, ended February 2, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This was really good.
I like how you worded your last stanza:
"Because Forever be Death."
In the third line of stanza six, line 23, I didn't really like your use of a question mark to end the line. It seems out of place since the rest of the poem lacks punctuation.
Thanks for entering!
Good luck! -
Expressive
You have described the traditional Grim Reaper with a new twist. Not a horrible apparition to many so much as a deliverer from pain. The lasw two lines are really touching, very poetic and serene. Death is not to be feared, it is a natural part of life. BTW, in line #42, I believe you might have meant 'passed' instead of 'pasted'
Very good flow and message with just the right amount of rhyme to keep it flowing smoothly. Kudos!
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wonderfull!
WOW, I was just cruising through different contests to find a poem to use for my poetry class (we have to find 2 a week that we really enjoy) and I came upon this. Outstanding work! The flow and the imagry are just BEAUTIFUL! great job!
BTW, i hope you dont mind but I will be using this for my class, I will probobly read it if I am asked to do so. Obviously I will be giving you full credit for this wonderfull piece of work.
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