There is a lonely tree
Bare,
Standing in front of me~
Shivering,
In the spring cold
Like a king,
Who has lost his gold~
No delightful colors
Just forlorn and dead,
A poor dead ghostly tree
Black and lifeless...
No green leaves in summer
Nor in autumn any red~
It moans,it creaks, it cracks
Branches, dead, decayed
Like empty stores
Ghostly...
Skeletal, bare, and black~
I wish...
I wish this tree would bloom
This dead forsaken tree
Escape from it's world of gloom~
There is a lonely tree
Bare...
Standing in front of me~
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Written June 6th, 2003
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This is great... I love a good tree poem!
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Wow.........
one time, awhile ago, I might have said you were looking at me.
I've read just a few of your poems, so far. This poem breathes with an expanse of imagination and scenery, impressions beyond the tapestry that a naked tree offers from a passing glance. In the gray shadows of an overcast day, you have brought color and content to an otherwise unremarkable still life. You shead a tear, offerings of your own water ...hoping to instill life; perhaps touch the green found in a small viable root laying dormant just for the while. -Darmok -
Excellent
I especially enjoyed your rhyme scheme in your other poems, but the absence of rhyme into the last stanza in this one I especially found enjoyable. While you have a knack for rhyme I would like to also encourage you to write imagery like "shivering in the spring cold" (a terrific image). Thank you for sharing. -
What a somber piece, yet this is something of hope within it. I think the tree regardless of bloom is beautiful as you described it, some beauties need no frivilous adornments, or brightly lit hues to be beautiful.
Thanks for sharing,
-Angel aka WoundedAngel.
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This write, to me, could just as well have been about yourself ( or any person) not just of a tree
I have a passion for trees...lol..in written form..they give a near eerie feel ..i think that's because i dream alot of a tree..long story...lol
I loved this write..so much can be read into it..
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This poem reminded me of Shel's Silverstein's book, "The Giving Tree". (too bad I can't underline that the way it is supposed to be.) I always feel sorry for neglected trees that I happen to cross paths with. It seems as if they are in a constant struggle with humans and they are slowly losing the battle. It makes me so sad. I actually talk to trees, and hug them as well. I feel as if they possess a deeper knowledge about those who really care.
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Susan, there is energy stored in this tree. It is rebirth in humous for other floral life, fuel for our fires to keep us warm, housed and fed.
Look not upon its passing as being death but a changing. Needed as it is both alive for it's Carbon Dioxide but in death for it's transfer of different energy to us. You too are in my prayers, my friend.
There is a renewal of life in every death. -tj-
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This poem is lovely and sad. I love that drawing you chose. I would change the color of the font to brown if I were you. The yellow is kind of hard to read.
Yes I do love my trees.
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the tree shall bloom when it is ready to bloom loved this one hun, very beautiful, descriptive and a bit sad. I wish to sit by the lonely tree and share my secrets with it Blessed be
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excellent
This is awesome, Susan. I feel this could be interpreted in a literal sense or a metaphorical sense. Either way it is vividly descriptive and beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
~Kathy -
oh, me likes this:) the first stanza repeated at the end:) that was nice, and this poem seemed so sad and lonely, but really well written:) I really liked this susan:)
now why didn't you enter my contest???:P (that had nothing to do with the poem, but i thought i'd mention it...)
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Excellent! Loved it!
I loved this, Sis! There's a half-dead tree in my back yard. I love that tree! I have seen it go from a full, upright tree to a fallen-down, barely surviving stump. The root looks like a duck (I kid you not!) The animals (chipmunks, squirrels, rabbits) love that tree as much as I do! The squirrels love to scratch their backs in the hollowed out part of the trunk. The rabbits like the security of the higher grass and little purple flowers that grow under and around it. The chipmunks have a great time running across it, in it and around it! As long as I live, that tree will survive! It means a lot to me. Ironically, it fell the week the twin towers fell, but instead of being a grim reminder of that tragedy, it's a symbol of hope because no matter what happens to it, it is still beautiful to me.
Luv Ya!
< 3 Maureen
P.S.: Even though it's lying on its side, it still gets plenty of leaves!
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this was such a wonderful poem . i think that you really did it grand. i love poem on natrue. and this was great. I thank you for shareing it
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makes me want to decorate it like the charlie brown tree in the christmas cartoon!!!
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Beautiful and amazing write, Susan:) I agree with Sherry, we all feel like that lonely tree, at times
Love ya,
Karen
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excellent,flows,visual,caught me
Very well written. Seems to follow the general theme of my selections, today! I do not know, why? It is a hidden message that I am not alone in this very deep,dark,black,quicksand of a pit. My lifes' compass haywire. Like the tree old and worn and finally has given it. It will flourish no more?Is it that? The tree is caught and has to choose life or death? My mind is all confused. I do not know if I make any sense or logic today or not? just trying to survive the hour. Miserable weather, continues to torture my body. No change until Sunday, they say! # days seems like an eternity to me right now! I need sunshine! Or hibernate until weather can fall into a comfort zone for my worn body. The background very confusing and fits well. Just like my spinning mind, is now. God Bless You.... Let's Hope tomorrow is a better day????? thanks 4 sharing, good work, here. sad, it takes AP and a PC to get me through another day of condemning struggle! Find it very strange indeed???
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Ps good picture with this one:)
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I liked this one better Susan, even though its sad it showed the insight of a tree and your compassion into it.....And sometimes people feel like that lonely tree....waiting for the colors to bloom inside them and out......Well done dear:) Sherry
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This is very well written, it flowed very nicely. I liked how you described the tree as it is now and then wishing it would bloom with beautiful and colorful flowers surrounding its bare branches. I also liked how you repeated your first stanza. Liked it a lot. Great write! Keep writing!!
º·.Wishing-Blue.·º
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