Dear, the day i saw you,
my heart spun like a ferris wheel.
My love couldn't stay still,
once broken now it can heal.
When you say,"Hi", i fly,
my feeling for you is soo real.
Sometimes my love can be fragile,
but don't worry, you my heart will conceal.
Loving you is my skill,
a love like mine no one can steal.
Every day whishing for your love,
hoping for a love forever deal.
When you say you will,
you forgive me when i kneel.
Now your heart and mine make one,
in you i found what's real.
A contest entry
- Politically Incorrect Part 1 by WisdomWarrior.
1300 points, ended January 26, 2007, 22 entries
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Comments
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Creativity: 5/10
Concept: 5/10
Language: 5/10
Overall Effect: 6/10
Final Grading: 21/40 -
Thank you for entering. You can fix as many errors as you like and make as many changes as you like until the end of today.
I have read your piece but I won't judge it until after the 26th.
Thanks for entering. Thanks for making a difference.
John
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AWWWWWWWW THIS IS REALLY SWEET , sTORM
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