I know it's hard for some to understand.
Why in the world, I am like I am?
Well have you been attacked on all sides before?
You see, Me, I'm waging a personal War.
Depression for me is an attack in my mind.
All my emotions get all entwined.
I know this also hurts all that I love.
There I stand at the cliffs edge, all I need is a little shove.
It's not on purpose, I seemingly have no control.
Yes I know I do, so I've been told.
Just once say nothing, and try to understand.
Show me that you truly love me, prove it please,
and lend me your hand
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Sometimes we all know what to do, but could use help in doing it. How many people are really willing to do that?
I always try!
Please tell me what you think
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You left me thinking....
I shall be back to process your thoughts.
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Thinking is always a good sign, hopefully my writing does that a lot. Connie
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nicely done, but a little too "telling", could be better with some concrete images, more detail. a pretty good landing at the end. But give "cliff's" an apostrophe. Keep penning, and be well.
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Thanks for the advice, I appreciate your time, and suggestions.
However I like it as it is, it's me. Connie
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Great flow goin on here. Personal war perfect description of this poem. you've illistrated brilliant confusion. I do believe we all try to fathom that endless question of why we're here and where we came from and just everything. natural human curiosity! I love how you keep to a basic rhyme scheme i always believe that it enhances the poem. awesome awesome!
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It's nice to know that my message was clear, confusion is a perfect word for it. Connie -
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I'm glad my point was so clear, it is a personal war for me. Also thanks for taking the time to read it. Connie
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i think we all kinda go through the why am i here stage...its so emotional and it hurts...very nice poem it stressed that emotion we all get very well!!
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Thanks, it's nice to know that it's so clear.
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Nice write, seems that your going through alot of self confliction.
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You've got it, SOMETIMES WE JUST CAN'T DO IT BY OURSELVES. Connie
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Simple in a good way
This poem reminds me of a friend who always tells me "I know what to do, but I need people to tell me." It also reminds me of a line from a song in Disney's version of Alice in Wonderland: "I give myself very good advice, but I seldom ever follow it." You have captured an aspect of humanity well in this piece. -
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It's great to know that so many people got my simple message.
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Bravo
So well written, the words and rhyme flow with no bumps in the road. And the idea of just needing a hand, no words, no comments, no opinions, just a hand to help you stand...Well done!
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A simple message, sometimes that's all we need. Thanks for reading.
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powerful words
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