Flowing from hate,
from love, lust, or greed.
Letting it spill out,
relief is our need.
With tears we let out
what is otherwise pent.
We scream and we cry
and we write and we vent.
We let you read script
peeled straight from our heart,
hoping you will care
after reading our art.
Support through a word
may save us that day
when we might have otherwise
thrown our life away.
Words are the medium
through which the power derive
and the manner of the word
determines if we survive.
Power through words,
words through our mind,
and we rhapsodists strive
for the right words to find.
In a list
A contest entry
- Round 1 Of Many by Dark Whispers.
440 points, ended June 24, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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We scream and we cry
and we write and we vent.
We let you read script
peeled straight from our heart,
hoping you will care
after reading our art.
all of your words are honest and beautiful. and just wow. i feel like i always know the right things to say but not when it comes to your work. you are amazing. thats all i can say and i feel like even that is not enough to say... -
Interesting piece my fellow poet. I enjoyed reading this piece. I like how you describe the heart of many poets. Great work.
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luv it
you have such an intense way of delving into the meaning of words...I can relate,luv this write. The discription is perfect...the intensity is deep!!Your words ring in the reflection of my thoughts like they are calling me...(so relatable)!!! -
This is a really great piece. I noticed you made the finalists in the contest, congrats! I loved the last two lines. Words are very powerful whether people admit it or not.
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This is really very good, it rhymed well also, this was a really great write and thanks for entering
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that is really good. verry true too.
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Now you see me ...
Now you don't
Guess Guess Guess who I am
I'm sure you'll never be able to do that
Buttwipe
oops .. did I give myself away?
Byebye
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o.O wtf?
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It was me
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I know that....
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This is so true when people write poetry it is to vent and to get out or emotions and i do want people to read it and tell me that it is good or that they can relate it shows me that not only do i go through the pain but others do too... blah blah blah haha well nice poem i really liked it.
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Awesome
Wow, That was really well written, it just sticks in your mind, and such an easy rhythm, simply flows from the page to your mind... its simply awesome.
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let me start with a quote, "I hate those other people,
the ones who call themselves writers
but really just shit all over the page and
congratulate each other on the varying color and smell and texture of their shit;
but it’s all just shit, Hank."
The poem is written in verse form with only spaces in random places that do not qualify it as poetry. There is no real message portrayed in it at all, rather it sounds like something an elementary school student would say and is very surface level. It leaves me feeling offended that you think that is my motivation and that puddle of muck you coughed up is why i write or how i write. The use of a rhyme scheme is extremely amateurish as well.
I am in a very critical mood right now. I am not saying you can't write poetry; I am only saying this one is absolute shit through and through. -
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Don't even worry about. It takes someone used to writing shit to recognize shit when they see it so I guess it just comes natural to you. I use a rhyme scheme that is common not amateurish, this poem was not about you, it's about real poets, and as much as I appreciate critiques, listening to someone call something that I put work into shit just doesn't really sit well with me so next time you feel the need to open your mouth to say something that nobody wants to hear, close it and let it leave the right hole: your ass. Thank you.
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haha .. nice nick
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Glad you like it. I don't take insults to my poetry lightly, especially when it is a good piece. That person just needs to take a Midol.
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hey ..
if you didnt giveback a damn good comment .. i'd have put in my two cents...
This is MY favourite poem from you ... no one can insult it like that.
(hehe, i tend to be a lil possesive)
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Love rhapsodizes all the time, either in love or out of love, the words play a part in it all. I liked the flow in this, it sings as it should. Love, C
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awesome
you've truly captured the mind of a poet.
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so powerful. it tells the story of those of us that truly write just to get things off our chests. Maybe no one will read it but it helps us to use the words as actions. Thank you for writing this wonderful piece.
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I am not a fan of repeated ending words but then that's just one of my preferences. The poem is intense, and shares sentiments with the reader that are easy to relate to. You've lead us well on a journey of the heart. This is nicely written. I am glad I clicked onto this featured poem. You have a flare with the pen.
april nicole
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nick .. im featuring again
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I really liked this poem.
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That was a breathtaking write. The power behind the writing, supporting the idea, was invigorating. Wonderful poem. It's like the life of a poet was just spilled out in one simple, yet complicated, piece. Brilliant.
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"With tears we let out; what is otherwise pent."
I like this, but I think 'release' would be a better word since you used 'spill out' previously, and it sounds a little less...repetitive, I guess. I think it'd help the flow of the poem.
"We let you read script; Peeled straight from our heart; hoping you will care; after reading our art."
That's definitely my all-time favorite part of this poem.
That and: "Words are the medium; through which the power derive; and the manner of the word; determines if we survive." It seems to define the essence of writing poetry, though I don't think that was your intention.
Either way, I really loved this. I saw it posted in a group and I wasn't sure if it would be worth the read because several don't really effect me, but I'm glad to have the occasional unexpected, and very welcome, surprise. Excellent write ^^
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This poem is beautiful, it instantly became one of my favorites. I agree with SobbingxLullaby, that part was my favorite. Keep up the good work!
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Whoa!!!!!!! Talk about amazing here. I loved this. I could feel the emotion and message you were trying to convey within this piece. It said so much to me because I can relate to this.
With tears we let out
what is otherwise pent.
We scream and we cry
and we write and we vent.
We let you read script
peeled straight from our heart,
hoping you will care
after reading our art.
This section right here was my favorite becuase it says everything about who I am and what I'm all about. I write when I feel, so this poem amazed me so much. Great piece!!!!
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awesssssssssoooooomeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!
that was a great write!!!!
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That is really good. Your friend has talent.
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Quite amazing! Truly inspirational!!! Loved it! Oh too true.
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excellent for the project
YES I rate this ***
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not for comments
its good to get comments on the write, but I think its not good to write only for comments .....still plants bloom in deep forest even if there is no one to see the beauty ....how ever ....I like this poem...
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I agree that plants are still beautiful if there is nobody there to see their beauty, but for those who are beautiful, why not appreciate them fully?
Thanks for the comment.
-Nick
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wow...
That's amazing... I loved these stanzas..
'We scream and we cry
and we write and we vent.
We let you read script
peeled straight from our heart,'
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i really really love this poem. You are so truly right too. We do hope for people to care after they have read our "art" that we have written deep within our to express the right feelings. I love every word in this poem begining to end.
Aryn -suicidal revenge-
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awsome! excellent write i enjoyed reading something with such individuality nice work!
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excellente!
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WoW
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this is good uve got talent =)
xX*Cheyenne*Xx**
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this is an excellent write. not overly long-good. goes right to the point. tells it like it is or should be. thank you for sharing God bless you always
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I really like this poem. It's so true, you have definately found the right words for this poem. I think that it is very unique and interesting. Sometimes it's so hard to find the right words to say or write down so it is meaningful. Compassion comes from the heart, and the heart needs to convey the emotion and feelings into words. This poem is self explanitory if you just take the time to read it. I loved every word of it and I think you did awesome!
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I don't know how to describe your poem, wonderful would be too weak. Unique! Is the proper word for such poetry, I love it since it makes you think, question the world in my mind. There could be another meaning but that's point of view. Magnificent.
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I've taken the liberty of suggesting some minor modifications. You, of course must be the final arbiter.
Flowing from hate,
from love, lust, or greed,
to let it spill out,
relief is our need.
With tears we release
what is otherwise pent;
we scream and we cry
and we write and we vent.
We let you read script
writ straight from our heart,
hoping you'll care
after reading our art.
Support through a word
may save us that day,
when we might otherwise
have thrown life away.
Words are the medium
through which our powers derive
and the manner of those words
determines if we should survive.
Power derives from the words
which flow through our mind,
so, as rhapsodists, we strive
the right words to find.
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EXCELLENT
Your poem was really great. It captured how people feel as they sit there and try to think up words for their poems, and how it can be meaningful. And how by writing a person can express their feelinga and feel relief, that they otherwise could have not expressed. Keep up the great work!
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EXCELLENT AND HEART FELT
So true this poetry for we are each others ears and compassions for through this sight so many people have helped me in so many ways including you thanks for the lovely write here
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i absolutely loved this, it was an amazing write and i loved your words.
my favorite part would have to be:
We scream and we cry
and we write and we vent.
We let you read script
peeled straight from our heart,
hoping you will care
after reading our art.
Support through a word
may save us that day
when we might have otherwise
thrown our life away.
this was an excellent part and i just loved this, the words were very strong and i loved the emotions in them,
keep writing
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powerful
this is a great poem, so direct and strong. i think everyone here will get the message from this poem, fantastic work!
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phat
those are some tight rhymes man. you spit hot fire!!!
lines 13- 16 could use some work but other thatn that its sick. -
phat
those are some tight rhymes man. you spit hot fire!!!
lines 13- 16 could use some work but other thatn that its sick.
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thunderluver
i love it!!! its very good keep writing!
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amazing keep it up
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excellent
You rock! Spilled right from the heart.
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yes, this is so true and I love the flow. It is awesome. Keep penning I can feel such sweet emotion throughout this poem. AWESOME!!!
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i really like this poem.. it is really deep, and i do believe that i know exactly how you were feeling when you wrote this...
keep up the good work and Great Write!!
~Wind~
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a very intense view and I had the same thought as Janice about the capitalization and the possiblitiy in the AP book. I further think that this might present better center aligned, especially if you utilize the suggestion mentioned. Just a thought there, though. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e
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Hi NIck
Just a comment to make this poem perfect for our poetry book.( IF you are interested in submitting it)
Don't capitalise each line. Only after a sentnce has ended.Even in poetry Capitals only come after full stops or imaginary fullstops. If you make thoe changes your poem will be creatively totally correct.
It is excellent and I would love to see it get in the book. Max for book is 30 lines so this fits SOOOO well.
Please let me know
Hugs
Jan
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I would be honored to have my poem put into the AP book. I went through and fixed the capitalization as you said and hope everything is as it should be. Thank you for considering my poem for the book.
-Nick
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A very good message
This poem explains so much about young people and their writing. IN fact not only young people but older people as well. Me for one. Excellent. I shall email in private with a comment.
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I went through this one more time
and liked it
then scrolled up
to add it to my bookmarks
then i saw it was already bookmarked
dumby
i guess u really did it good to make me want to bookmark it twice
by the way
i'd look it up
but i have to go school in like ... half an hour
and i forgot what rhapsody meant
i am so stupid
lol, anyway i gone
adios nickipoo
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Isn't that the truth. I wouldn't be here right now if i couldn't write. Just some people never understand how much words can mean. But this piece made it quite clear. Good job.
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Mmmmm, glad you enjoyed it! May our words live on!
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I really like this one.
Nice write.
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Support through a word
May save us that day
When we might have otherwise
Thrown our life away.
thats my favourite part of it all
probably because it is true
and perhaps because that is the reason i write
one thing i hate the most
is people expecting me to write anything
i dont write on demand .. just for myself
this is really strong
and in fact .. i like this
excellent work
keep it up
~NeveR~
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But we do not only write for ourselves, we write for our audience as well. How they respond is what gives us our boost, so as we write for the boost, we write for them.
In another perspective, writing for yourself is the only person that you should write for. Writing for none but your own self-satisfaction and relief can be one of the most beautiful secrets in life.
Thank you for your heartfelt comment, and I will return the favor.
-Nick
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Brillant!
I like this one ALOT. It's offically one of my favorites you've written, because like many of your pieces it conveys a strong point. This one in particular states an undeniable truth about those who write. Love the rhyming. Very fine job.
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very well done! it flows so nicely. i especially loved the lines:
"We let you read script
Peeled straight from our heart,"
we as writers reveal everything in our pieces, and want to make others understand, or at least have a glimpse into our beings. this piece is wonderful, i really enjoyed reading it.
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