My inevitable being
slowly submerging into
the corridor of life
Covered in a shroud
of sheer virginity,
seeking truth, as
my journey resonates to
the hum of the universe
My white cocoon,
pure and innocent,
free from demons
The nourishing milk of life
manifests a Woman
In a list
A contest entry
- Double Take by Silent Cougar.
450 points, ended February 4, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Such a lovely poem describing the essence of woman. I especially liked the last two lines, "The nourishing milk of life manifests a Woman".
I think this one should have won a trophy for the honesty and virginalness of it, LOL, if in fact there is a word virginalness, lol, I really don't think that is a word.
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Very, very, good. Aa I already commented.
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BEAUTIFUL
I simlpely love how you viewed this picture,the words, my white cocoon pure and innocent,free from demons The nourishing milk of life manifests a WOMAN.Very true words and deeply spoken...
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In being so fond of the love and life that is woman I so naturally felt a dear draw to this write. Especially in the ending stanza.
I am a big fan of ending a poem on just the right note. You indeed struck that note very well with me.
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Empowering
My white cocoon,
pure and innocent,
free from demons
The nourishing milk of life
manifests a Woman
This is so good. The picture and the words flow so well together. And that finish...well it is simply magnificent! Good luck here in this contest.
Becky
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This was very interesting. Loved it.
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A very interesting view taken here, one that shows a different light on the subject matter, the journey from birth to the life we lead is our making. well done and thanks for entering.
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I liked this.. awsome
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Very, very imaginative
I can see it! I can feel it. I can see it and feel it. I don't want to stop. I can feel it and see it... *sigh*
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Ah, I get this,a ctually.....we are washed and waiting for whatgever that calls us to emerge from the cocoon that has kept us from soaking up to much of the world and it whiniing ways....lo..you O- woman you...lololol
No, really, this is awesome....
good thing you are my ebst real-life friend......did you see I typed a nasty word that means something else to different people? LOLOL..oh geex...you gotta take better care of me that that..
The word I used means "whining" but I think it must mean something to others.....
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