I didn't know
From the back
He looked
just like you
Your hair
the clothes
the body
But he wasn't you
Nobody else
is
you
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Olivia Living
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pretty good
Pretty good, sweet simple and to the point, great job -
A very simplistic, but very powerful write. Well done!
thank you for the entry, but could you please put your username in the AN?
-Lena (grumpybrat20's co-judge) -
good write thank you for entering my contest.
i see no need to spell check or anything else.
i loved the intire thing
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Remarkable !
I really like this piece. It is short but sweet -
I like it.
At first it seems like a superficial mistake, but then it seemed to me to become a lovely tribute.
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Great
This is an interesting poem... It's simple, but it says so much. It seems that you have the same theory about poetry that I do... It doesn't have to be complicated to be good. The only suggestion I have for it is perhaps that you say "Your hair, Your clothes, Your body" or "The hair, The clothes, The body." That's only my opinion, though. It's a minor thing. Either way, it's still a great poem that all comes together in the last three lines. It makes a powerful statement. -
What a sweet poem!
This poem is packed full of love!
And I LOVE it, too, by the way. 
Thank you for sharing your sweet thoughts this day! A sad, yet beautiful write!
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