I'm fat.
But I'm not ugly.
I'm fat.
But I'm not dumb.
I'm fat.
But I'm not substandard.
I'm fat.
But I'm not silent.
My body is large, my mouth is larger, and my thoughts are more than you can comprehend.
My hunger is not for sustenance or subsistence, but for persistence of the acknowledgment of my existence. I hate the resistance to the truth of who I am. For instance...
I am a woman!
(not a size)
I am a wife!
(not a ball and chain)
I am a lover!
(not a whore)
I am a friend!
(not a slave)
I want fool proof truth, not subsidized lies from behind cruel eyes. Why is honesty so flighty and abandoned so lightly by those who see integrity in superfluous absurdity?
I guess it will never be that way for me.
Author notes
Second attempt at something that could be Slam Poetry.
My hero is K-Dense (http://allpoetry.com/K-Dense).
Please tell me what you think
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I am a big fan of slam poetry although I literally did read this poem outloud before I could really appreciate it
I am going to have to agree with untamed melody This is an excellent line and it was very poignant.
"My hunger is not for sustenance or subsistence, but for persistence of the acknowledgment of my existence. I hate the resistance to the truth of who I am"
I think you found a good way to end the poem and it sort of tied the whole thing together. Good work, keep writing
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You know, it's one thing to know that people read my poetry, but it's another to know that you took the time to read it OUT LOUD in FORMAT. Gosh. And particularly since you are a fan of slam poetry and therefore have WAY more knowledge about it than I do, I'm even more honored that you liked this piece.
Thanks so much for your comments and encouragement.
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My hunger is not for sustenance or subsistence, but for persistence of the acknowledgment of my existence. <-- that has to be the best line I have EVER read in a poem.
I love love love how you have more than one word in a sentance that rhymes. That always appeals to me.
I also love how you have the "I am _____ but Im not ____" that is genious!
You just made it to my favorites =]
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YEE!!! You just made my bust out ALL my teeth! LOL I nearly hooted! haha I'm so glad this is going over well. Your encouragement is highly appreciated.
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well when you write such a good peice your going to get good recognition. =] good job
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You go girl! Great write!
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HAH! Thank you!
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Woo! I love how your are completely straight forward in this poem. You say it the way you feel and htink it and you don't care at all what other people think. I'm loving how this is more of a intimidating rant than anything. you know what you want and it has the flow of a poem and subtle rhyme of a poem yet you wouldn't know it because of some unusual organizations. I'm more of the traditional poet. i organize in stanzas usually quatrains to get my point across but you my friend have succeeded in proving your point powerfully and professionally in a brand new structure. this is really quite amazing. I immensely enjoyed this!
~Sorrow~
Ps: thanks for your wonderful comment on my poem Rope's End -
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Thank you!! This came out of mindset of frustration more than anything. hah Funny what inspires, eh?
I used to use only the more traditional forms, but I wrote so much that I got tired of the constraints. When I started branching out, I got some really cool results, so now I just go with the flow. Sometimes the flow is organized, sometimes not so much, but I feel that poetry should flow one way or another or it isn't really poetry for me.
I really appreciate your comment on this. It's very encouraging.
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