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You Served Us Well {Silver}

You've served us well
dear house of mine
Remembering back to the
time that you were born
Our village friends joined
 the arduous task
In the birthing pangs of you
 
With the final nail in place
We all celebrated the day
You were finally complete
 
You've served us well,
dear house of mine
Protected us from scorching heat
Plus kept us dry and
safe from hail
But, in life there does come storms
Some leave us unscathed,
some in disrepair
 
One more curtain to be hung
pictures to be put in place
our house was now our home 

You've served us well
dear house of mine
Laughter once resounded
from within your walls
Moments of sorrows lived there, too
Family celebrations,
times of sweet devotions, 
our haven from the world 
 
Meals around the family table
The days events shared by all
How wonderful to have a home 
 
Yes, dear house of mine
You served us well 
Years of memories
will be buried in your heap
One last picture to put in place
in our precious book,
next to the first one
we ever took
You served us well 

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  • Samplette gold member
    January 25, 2007
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    Wow..just the old house of mine gave your piece strength and honor. A great write. Thank you for entering.
    Sam


    • Vickie J
      January 26, 2007
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      What a thrill!!!! Thank you soooooo much!!!!! You're the best! You in that blue bathtub, you sexy thang!!!

  • loveasyouareloved
    January 23, 2007

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    This reminds me of the poem I entered for this contest! I liked the form of the poem and it was sweet and full of warm thoughts. I hope you do well!


  • CountryCousin
    January 22, 2007
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    I like this too.

    It does remind me of the homes that were destroyed by Hurricane Katrina as well as the tusami. I think you evoked strong emotions here.


  • Sherry gold member
    January 22, 2007
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    Lots of memories in that house and feeling to this. Had a sadness and yet appreciation to this. Look at that picture wow intresting how they lived in that very different from homes here in United states.


  • Theater Of Dreams
    January 22, 2007

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    Beautiful.

     Just wonderful, very much like a song lyric- exceptional verse and a lot of deep emotion and sentimentality. Great work.

    Laughing


  • sunny day
    January 22, 2007

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    SUPERB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This is superb and you captured that picture with such clarity. Your loving soul brought forth a write that fit the picture perfectly. I had looked at this contest and all I could think of was Gilligan's Island. LOL You looked at it with your heart. I have to remember to do that all the time. Not after watching the boob tube. Thank you for sharing this masterpiece with all of us and you have my very best wishes in the contest. It sounds golden to me. A standing ovation definitely a must to go along with my applause here. Love and God bless, Joyce


  • Forms of Me
    January 22, 2007

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    GREAT WORK!

    This is a great work....I think you did bring the picture to life indeed.

    I wish you the best of luck.
    LIZ


  • Frogzter gold member
    January 22, 2007

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    You have really brought the picture to life and made it a home full of loving memories to cherish! This is a wonderful piece my friend and a delight to read! Best wishes in the contest!
    frogz~

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