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© Aimee Lee
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For Col ..
Please tell me what you think
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!!!!! What a treat! I've just come back to AP after a looooooong break and imagine my surprise when I see that you've posted another wonderful, beautiful piece of art.
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this was amazing...in fact you accomplished giving me goosebumps! the ending was my favorite...i just loved it. this was a really good peom, and i cant wait to read some more of your work. keep up the amazing work
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I've never thought someone could write something so..true and beautiful and real and deep and wonderful.
I mean...I really, really enjoyed this.
applaud applaud applaud.
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I feel the love. Beautifully conveyed. I am thrilled for you two. 'like insomnia on a crowded sidewalk'
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one of a kind, a fortunate find
how you can go from "you must have thought / i was incapable of spilling milk:" with semantical magic weaving sensual, deep, intimate, yet so very uniquely styled verses that describe such a deep connection into those three words, not just written but emoted--'stay with me', boggles my mind. for in those three words the weight of the rest of the piece balances out so beautifully and falls lightly like a feather into that last line--not to say that the last line is to be taken lightly at all, just that the rythym and flow to it alows it flow from your lips lightly, precisely, oh so ......... just right.
Yes, it is "Mona Lisa in White", from the milk to the last three words.
I am just sitting here, after reading it aloud three times, letting it resonate still. My pen is green with envy, and it used to have purple ink.
Colin, I am jealous of you for having such a beautiful piece written specifically for you. You are one fortunate man.
Thank you for sharing this. With your permission, Antique, I will copy this into my old-fashioned hand written journal, where I can treasure it and study it. It never hurts to set ones goals higher.
~pf
Apologies I'm so behind on comments, my life kinda fell apart and the glue is still drying.
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jesus, your a breathetaking woman indeed^^. ive gotten to know Col through this site, and i am very happy for the two of you. your his perfect girl far as i can see, you write as beautifully as him^^. i know thats lame probably. this is freaking amazing, peom and the heart behind it. very nice job.
~Sidra Sabella.
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whoa what i write! i just can't say a word except magnificent and inspirational!
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hows it to say that i'm crying?
this. is like what i've been thinking for the the past 6 long dark months.
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oh my god, I'm so glad you're posting stuff again, I missed going to your page and being inspired by your beautiful stuff!
This is gorgeous, it's so all over the place, but it makes so much sense. [unlike me, I seem to be incapable of forming coherent thought at the moment. ]
It was emotional and amazing. :] yay!
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thanks hun .. glad you like it
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who cares j/k your back
thats awesome...so is this piece...you might wanna step over to my page briefly most of it is still crap but i thought you might like hell's kitchen...im glad your back dude...missed ya
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thanks i will check that one out next time i am on, only signed in briefly for now
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*huggle attack*
You're back!!!!!!! [at least I hope! *crosses fingers and toes*]
as always my luffly butterfly doll, this was nothing less than gorgeous. It was tantilzing [in a way] with your beautiful language. Very capitivating and engaging. It was full of stale fairytale enchatments and all the distored prettiness that goes with it.
I could relate to this a lot when reading it, the truth, kind of stung in a way. I don't know why. But something I can't pin point, something in the truth and message of this, hurt to read.
Beautiful, this was outstanding, Aimee. I hope that you continue to post more.
I've missed you mucho and loverzzzzz you!
x♥x
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thanks dolly
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beautiful piece
very taking descriptions of feelings and great use of imagery... the poem unfolds into a dramatic path of raw emotions. i kept feeling it was becoming more and more numb as well as more and more alive, quite out of control really. thanks for sharing, hope to read more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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thank you .. your comments are always greatly appreciated
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Spellbindingly beautiful
from the depths of butterfly requiems and glass moons, this poem rises like a phoenix gilded with wings made of resurrection love; the sliding stanzas each reveal a paragon of unique and astounding metaphors as the imagination envelops the craft and deftly guides syllables to and from the heart. The poem creates a timeless dreamscape feel as though the ineffective and mundane have been forsaken for the most profound of moments; spellbound notion....this poem stands alone and begs for attention, because the emotive cadence of its language is original, rare and heart-drippingly exciting. Mona Lisa in white; poetry in artistic gold.
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thanks hun .. considering it was written for you ..
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heartbreakingly beautiful
this was beautiful. i have always loved reading your words, because they paint such amazing pictures in my mind. you have a way with metaphors, and with the english language in general.
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thank you for the applause and beautiful comment*hugs* .. i have no idea if these emoticons still work on here .. been a while :|
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any thoughts that i could summon the ability to express
so completely pale in comparison to what is felt when reading this...to me, the foundation of the craft is the feelings that inspire the author to perform...and no matter what the production may be, you perform flawlessly...i wish to be more direct, but at the very least, just know that this is absolutely captivating.
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thanks Mr Outlaw .. that's a beautiful comment
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