Sketches of childhood memories
escaping through daydreaming while
lost amongst concrete walls;
reminiscing within attributed
formalities gives grace another time of togetherness
Author notes
lol i nearly went over the line stipulation but caught it in time. enjoy
A contest entry
- Imagine by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended March 29, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Airee...
Airee... I hear you. I like this piece. -
A creative and beautiful piece of writing. Great language use and form. Thanks for sharing and good luck in my contest... x Butterfly.
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Beautiful
I love this so much. I've always been a fan of short pieces, pieces that give you only an idea and leave you thinking. A great job. I like how the chilhood memories are "lost amongst the concrete walls." There are so many things that come to mind when I read that. I imagined graffiti at first, like a child making his mark. But then I thought, maybe the memories aren't that playful. Maybe you're speaking of a concentration camp, or some sort of bad experience. Great job.
<3 Casey
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this is good, you know it makes me remember this imte i was a kid and i was told to seat in the corner and i let my mind wonder, that corner was the best pushishment i had every had
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