The speed of innocence passing by,
meets the slow pace of one within a shell
older and somewhat wiser it can withdraw
from the worlds cruelest of blows,
while the boy and his puppy haphazardly dash on.
A contest entry
- Imagine by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended March 29, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Cute interpretation of the picture - the fast and the slow meet - much said in these five lines that explain what is happening in the contest picture. Easy to read and understand as well. Congrats on winning silver.
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A great take on the picture and wise words therein. Very clever and creative. Thanks for your entry and good luck in my contest... x Butterfly.
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Somehow I see a scene from "It's A Wonderful Life". the old man on the porch waiting for George to kiss Mary. And the lines "youth is wasted on the young" ring out. For a while there I thought yes....but now.. I wonder, is it really? For your last line tells me otherwise. They are meant to be haphazard and carefree, for we are adults far longer than we are children. Is the yearning for "do overs" that we are somewhat misguided by. Going back to your line "older and somewhat wiser". Then it is in the "wiser" that we now know what we have. We go out of the lines not because we haven't yet learned how to color, but because we can. For me, that is what makes life so much more "funner". :D
~~~~~~~Michelle~~~~~~~~~~ :F:F:F
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much said in few words
great contrast of youth and old, pace fast and slow
love the image of the boy and his puppy
good luck in this contest
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